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For Two...please read |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
~For Two...~ < !signature-->I set the table for two tonight, praying for you to show. I was sadly mistaken to think that you would know. I watched the candles burns, and the roses wilt a bit. Then I sat there starring at your empty chair, and cried in front of it. I had a feeling you would know, to show up here tonight. Just to see my face, filling with delight. You never came to the door tonight, or even made a call. I hoped that you be here, to share this day with me, and maybe even remember our anniversary. Nikolette Sadness He never came. i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. [This message has been edited by Nikolette Sadness (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
if you read this pelase reply...i'm kinda sensitive...sorry ~the author~ i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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Enchanted Star Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 14New Port Richey, FL |
[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
just to let everyone know ive decided to resign from writing anymore....thanks Nikolette Sadness i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Nikolette......don't let this one bad apple spoil your talents.......i enjoyed this poem.....very heartfely i am appalled that any one at passion's would be so negative as this.....i'm not going to say it just keep your chin up ok? |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Nikolette...I agree with Jeffrey...dont let one persons stupidity make you give up writing...This is a sad but lovely work. You convey all the pain of loneliness and I think its great. |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
this person...whoever she is...complimented my wokr once before...but tonight she went to every poem i had and said something negative abot it...see for yourself...most of my stuff is is dark passions i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
And I'm deleting them as fast as I can... I wish I had access here in Open. I've let the other moderators know!  Christopher |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Oh, and as an afterthought Nikolette, LOL, this should probably go in Prose. We welcome it there!  |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
what is prose? heheh *geek* Nik i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
LOL!!! If you go here: http://netpoets.com/cgi/pip/Ultimate.cgi?action=intro&BypassCookie=true then scroll down the screen a wee bit, you'll see Prose. Come on in and take a peek! Christopher |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I like the way you spilled your heart on this one...take care of that soft heart..This reminds me of the time I waited for hours at Knotts Berry Farm with a dozen roses hoping my soon to be exwife would show up for a reuniting date...I waited 3 or 4 hours and finally gave the roses to another lovely lady and left feeling very sad and rejected...I will always be happy that I attempted to make up with her but I was sad for we never did makeup...keep writing...your not feeling sorry for yourself...you are just releasing your pain and your frustrations...if anyone doesn't like that they don't have to read your writing...James |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Nikolette, This is a sad piece and written from the heart... But this should be in prose as Christopher says... Anyways keep writing regards, sudhir ...and I dislike the guts of the fellow passions member who it seems doesn't know how we behave here or rather how to behave at all... I hope that the moderators take some strict actions against that person... so demeaning indeed! not fit for the repute of this lovely place at all... |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nikolette - One of the most important building blocks of this wonderful Passionate place is respect for each other. Without that, we wouldn't be what we are. I'm pleased to see that you've written something that obviously came from deep within you, and posted it here for our readers to enjoy. As you can see, our team works around the clock to ensure that mutual respect remains intact. Rude comments will not be tolerated. Keep posting, my friend.... You have much to say.. |
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notlikely2 Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 308UK |
Nikolette This is truly beautiful. You have reminded me of how, in the search for my own happiness, I too have hurt another. You have made me wonder how she feels right now. Even when you know you have made the right decision, it still hurts to realise that you have hurt someone else. Your poem has helped me to understand how it feels to be on the receiving end of that pain. Please do not stop writing. You have much to offer. And personally speaking, and with the greatest respect for my fellow writers, I do not agree that this necessarily belongs in prose. For me, it is true poetry and I am glad that you have had the courage to post it here. If someone is small minded enough to criticise your work, then it is they that have the problem...let them keep it...don't let them beat you. I want to say something to cheer you up. But I cannot think of anything. So here is a kiss. For you. X < !signature--> Love is like the mumps.....the older you are, the harder it hits you! [This message has been edited by notlikely2 (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Hi i hate to see someone with so much to give hurt badly enough to give believe me i have been through this kind of thing myself my advice for what its worth is write as much as you can get all the emotions out, talk to someone about it (If you need to talk to someone my e-mail is Weths_postbox@yahoo.com i'm always willing to be a shoulder to cry on). I love your poem i am a dark passions poet myself although i haven't posted there for a while but ill go there now and take a look. Walter Poe Oh Danny boy, the pipes, the pipes are calling From glen to glen, and down the mountain side The summer's gone, and all the roses falling 'Tis |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Nikolette, may I just say I found this very moving. It took me back to many years ago when someone I loved with all my heart would often keep me waiting all night long. I spent many nights waiting for the doorbell to ring or the sound of his car. And eventually crying myself to sleep, so I understand your pain well my friend. Oh and one more thing. Don't you dare give up writing. Allowing one rude and cruel person to cause this would be letting them win. You be a fighter, keep that tender heart but don't let anyone beat you. As the words to one awesome song, "I get knocked down but I get up again". Hang in there girly. And finally a big ole hug from me to YOU. Juls |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
I agree, do not give up on yur writing!!! You have a talent for it and it is shameful that someone here would actually condemn it. I thought this piece very touching, well thought out and well written. Keep going and enjoy it all........... |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Nikolette....this was so pure of heart...and tomorrow will be my 30th anniversary and I am expecting it to be forgotten ..so I do understand your feelings here.... also prose is the beautiful way you wrote this in sentence and paragraph style...it's still poetry just not in any verse form..or pattern... *ps...I didn't see what happened here..but I had a year of anonymous posters on another site and even though they won't admit it..they are usually either jealous...or a little on the crazed side with too much time on their hands....so stay here and in the prose forum..and the dark one and write your heart out... ~~soft hugs Maureen |
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Zion Junior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 33Melbourne Australia |
I think every one before me has said all there is to say but no one mentions the fact that the pain in the butt is more than likely afraid of your talent Don't stop writing because of a fool I added you to my libary so I can see more of your work |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Nikolette ... this is for you ... BREAK THE HOLD ... On what wind does darkness call? A gentle breeze or furious gale. Infectious seed of bleakest null; Sows deep depression, without fail. Scribe the darkened hollow words; To cleanse the sickness that embeds. Share your shadows to be heard; To expel the monster that we dread. Free your spirit from lightless ways; Feel darkness die its lonely death. Word and verse bring brighter days; Hope's fresh current to catch your breath. Break the hold of darkest chains; Unlock your mind with laureate's key. Tell the world with brightest refrains; Tell the story with new eyes to see. KEEP WRITING!!!! My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A. |
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David D Junior Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 19 |
I could really relate. I once had a meeting with my best friend and they did not show. I was crushed, but not near as much as this poem sounds. |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
thank you david...this is one of my faves... Nik i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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