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T McCoy
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0 posted 07-31-2000 11:53 PM       View Profile for T McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for T McCoy




when you left here
i surrendered
my mind to a
place in time
it must've froze man
i can't remember
the last time you
weren't on my mind

but my memory
is decomposing
either that or i'm
goin' blind
i see your face right
here before me
i try to focus
on your eyes

...but the image fogs you blur and fade away...


              - chorus -


       can't get you off of my mind
       i swear i'm frozen in time
       somethings wrong with my mind
       my memory must've been re-aligned
       cause every thought i have
       leads back to you      
       reality re-defined and
       jammed on automatic rewind
       it keeps you here by my side
       addicted to that place in time
       and all my thoughts inject a random
       fix of you
      
       can't get you off of my mind
       i play you back and rewind
       to keep you here by my side
       so i can gaze into your eyes
  
...until the image fogs and blurs and fades away...
      
                          

      
          


- time grabs you by the wrist directs you where to go so make the best of this test and don't ask why it's not a question but a lesson learned in time



[This message has been edited by T McCoy (edited 08-01-2000).]
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Paula Finn
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1 posted 08-01-2000 12:05 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

You ALWAYS make music in my mind

never say never
T McCoy
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2 posted 08-01-2000 04:15 AM       View Profile for T McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for T McCoy

...ALWAYS huh?....you keep telling me things like that and there won't be enough room here for my ego..!   THANKS!  
                  Tony
Rex Allen McCoy
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3 posted 08-01-2000 09:13 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

I want to hear this one put to music ...
nicely done

Kit McCallum
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4 posted 08-01-2000 09:16 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Perfect words to be placed to music Tony! Nicely penned!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
T McCoy
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5 posted 08-02-2000 03:02 PM       View Profile for T McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for T McCoy

       a big thanks to you both!

            

- time grabs you by the wrist directs you where to go so make the best of this test and don't ask why it's not a question but a lesson learned in time
poutprincess
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6 posted 08-02-2000 03:18 PM       View Profile for poutprincess   Email poutprincess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poutprincess

i agree with them above! this IS great....very easy to fall into!
JulieAnn
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7 posted 08-02-2000 03:23 PM       View Profile for JulieAnn   Email JulieAnn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JulieAnn

Wow Tony.....You have such talent for wiritng songs...maybe we could get chat and write one together....By the way nice to finally put a face with the name.....

Julie :)


Butterflies_dont_cry
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8 posted 08-02-2000 03:44 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

This would climb the charts in my book!  Great writing Tony~
T McCoy
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9 posted 08-02-2000 09:24 PM       View Profile for T McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for T McCoy

- sincere thanks to everyone -

if you could all just have eveyone you know send me dollar...LOL  

Julie...yea that might be pretty cool!
It would be a pretty interesting song i think...

Tony
Janet Marie
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10 posted 08-02-2000 11:38 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Tony this is excellent..such depth of emotion...
very well written...
this is the first work of yours Ive read
I believe..sorry, so many new poets of late
its getting hard to keep up.
but i will look for your work in the future.
very cool song..perfect title..
a belated welcome to passions from me
take care
jm

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~

serenity blaze
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11 posted 08-03-2000 12:16 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Is there more of this?  Do you play?  you might not know this but JM and I are back up singers (YES WE ARE--jm--hush!!)
and I have some experience as a booking agent--what instrument do you play?

We are ready to rock with this one.
Beth
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12 posted 08-03-2000 12:21 AM       View Profile for Beth   Email Beth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beth

~This was absolutely thrilling. I loved it!!~
T McCoy
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13 posted 08-03-2000 03:34 AM       View Profile for T McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for T McCoy

jm...thanks for the kind words and the welcome...
serenity...hmmm...i can hold the rhythm on bass...drums are pure FUN...but i pretend to sing!
yea, this is all of it; first verse just gets repeated...i think the repitition adds to the whole "rewind" thing.  you?
  sincere thanks serenity, as always...

beth...thank you...i haven't seen your name out there yet, but i'll be on the lookout...

Tony          
Janet Marie
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14 posted 08-03-2000 03:49 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

LOL at sen' saying I can sing..
serenity can sing Tony...
I hear shes a legend down on the French Quarter  
my little Mardi Gras songbird.
if i sing YOU ALL are gonna need backup LOL
but I have always wanted to be a groupie..
perhaps I can be the official guitar pic person LOL
( i gotta watch me twin sen' every minute)
shes always volunteering me for something  
later-poet-gators
im going to bed
jm
ethome
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15 posted 08-03-2000 04:10 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

I like that - image fogs - part at the end.
These are great lyrics...ballad I think ......good hook good title...feels to me like minor key or major seventh.....maybe minor and major mix-up in the chorus.
T McCoy
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16 posted 08-03-2000 04:29 AM       View Profile for T McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for T McCoy

jm...geez girl, we're already booked at the viper room...blame serenity  LOL  

ethome...i tell ya brother i do good to find any words...what you said...hmmmmm.....can ya send me the tab for that?

thanks to you both!

Tony
tracie66
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17 posted 08-03-2000 05:49 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Tony~
Wonderful job with this...very enjoyable indeed  
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

T McCoy
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18 posted 08-04-2000 03:27 AM       View Profile for T McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for T McCoy

thanks for the kind reply Tracie...
glad you enjoyed it...

Tony
Jenn E
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19 posted 08-04-2000 11:20 PM       View Profile for Jenn E   Email Jenn E   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jenn E

You have got my attention. OK, now I am singing and let me tell ya, singing is not my strong point...lol Enjoyed this..Thank you.

Jenn E
poetFemmeFatale
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20 posted 08-14-2000 03:40 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Oh geeze...Those two singing? ROFLMAO  Take it from me sir....uh....are they listening?  hehehe  (ducking down behind monitor)  **shaking head furiously!**     Although Janet does write some good country lyrics - I'm not sure you look like country though!  This was really good, I'm still trying to put my finger on the style this reminds me of.  GO LEAFS!  

"Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world! Live out your fantasies & mak
SpitFire
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21 posted 08-14-2000 03:50 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Hey there,...the title definately kix here. This poem/song is flowing with realism,...just so able to see it all. T...this part here..."all my thoughts inject a random fix of you",....that is so right on! So what happens. Ouch! Awesome work. Take care. *Peace.
Angel4aKing
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22 posted 02-08-2008 12:38 PM       View Profile for Angel4aKing   Email Angel4aKing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel4aKing

Where you been I miss your poetry.....o BTW my old screen name is JulieAnn this is my new one....

~~~kingsangel~~~

effjayel
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23 posted 02-08-2008 01:36 PM       View Profile for effjayel   Email effjayel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for effjayel

Good writing, enjoyed reading it..
 
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