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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
She gave him her heart < !signature-->Right from the very start She knew he was the one Who could raise the sun Gray skies turned to blue When he said I love you The weight on her chest Was finally laid to rest The day had looked bleak Until he made her weak Before they said goodnight He set her heart alight Miles apart on the phone She stopped feeling alone Her spirit began to soar In time he'd love her more Music, poetry, and cards Could fill a thousand yards Memories to always be cherished Even after their love had perished ---------------------------------------------------- Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats [This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 07-31-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Aww LW,...such tender writing here. You amaze me with the little stories that your poems always tell. Truly great. It's always like a little peek. Awesome. We should talk soon. Hope you're well. *Peace. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Lone Wolf, A surprise ending for a very lovely poem. I'm glad that I had the chance to visit with you, and read what you have written. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
What a beautiful love you speak of. Love like this is worth the pain of loosing it I think to have a moment in time with one that means so much and connects so deeply......for that I would shed a million tears...in fact I think I did that a time or two  Great writing my friend, this was beautiful work~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Music, poetry, and cards Could fill a thousand yards Memories to always be cherished Even after their love had perished ------ lovely... Lone Wolf, once again your quill has penned an exquisite poem... regards, sudhir |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Very lovely indeed~ |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Very lovely indeed The best and most beaytiful things in the world cannot be seen or touched...but are felt in the heart (Helen Keller) |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
A sad twist to this little tale, but very sweet just the same "Life is like music; it must be composed by ear, feeling, and instinct, not by rule."~ Samuel Butler ~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A lovely, touching rendering where distance does not keep those apart. Beautiful Lone Wolf! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Music, poetry, and cards Could fill a thousand yards Memories to always be cherished Even after their love had perished ------- What wonderful lines these are. Very nice read. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Lw, another wonderful expression of emotion here. Even at a time when the future looks bleak, you will always have those memories. Time heals the heart and then eventaully the good memories return. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Lone Wolf... I love the ending!!!! It leaves it to the reader to resolve it, and that makes for a play between writer and reader!! This is great stuff!!!! ~~ To Live is to Give ~~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SpitFire . . . Aww, what a sweet reply. Happy to hear you enjoy my little stories. Peek away!! LOL. Yes, we should talk soon.  Bill . . . Yes, a bit of a surprise at the end. Thanks for stopping by and reading. BDC . . . Believe me my friend, I have shed a million tears. It was something during its time. Nothing like it. Thank you for your kind words, sweets. Sudhir . . . So happy to see you enjoyed my friend. Those are my favorite lines too!! Beth . . .Thank you!! Jeffrey . . . Glad you liked my friend. Tess . . . Life has many twists. Thanks!! Kit . . . Distance is not too great for love. Thanks for reading. Eloise . . . Thanks, they seemed like a fitting end for this one. Marina . . . I know they will return one day. It will definitely take time. Thank you for reading. Sunny1 . . . Play on my friend!! Yes, it is always fun to leave them to find their own conclusions. Thank you!! Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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HM3 Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 169TX |
Perished, yet cherished. Lovely poem. Work like money doesn't matter, love like you've never been hurt, dance like nobody's watching... |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Yes, memories do last forever. For having loved makes us all who we are. Enjoyed very much. Jenn |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jenn...again you touch me so deeply never say never |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Amazing how that first love clings like a ghost long after the partners have separated. The things that made that true love so special never die. Such a very good job you have done here to capture the emotions of separation, when the old love says, "I still love you." |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh hon....how I can relate to this, but trust me, things will get better in time. Very sad, but very well written. ((((HUGS)))) |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
A very tender reflection, Lone Wolf. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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