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As Tears Fall |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
When you said you loved me Joyous tears rolled down my face While my heart was flying free You held me in a strong embrace When I opened my soul and let you in Trusting tears slipped down my cheeks To explain the feeling...I can’t even begin You and I floated to the highest peaks When I was screaming in the night Frightened tears were flowing free You soothed and held me tight Ceasing voices that haunted me When you made my dreams come true Thankful tears flowed from my soul You said I belonged to you And together we would become whole When trust was betrayed and lies told Broken tears abounded from my eyes Tarnished were the dreams of gold Clouds of regret filled the skies The well of my soul has been tapped dry The final tear drop has joined the sea Never more will you see me cry The salty waters rise and swallow me |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Bdc-Heart wrenching words of the betrayal of the one you loved. Don't stop stroking in that sea there girl we need you. Rescue is on it's way. Somewhere out there lies the heart that will beat with yours and keep you afloat with the joyous tears. Beautiful write my friend just beautiful. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I join Mark on the hope for future... butterflies this is an excellent render... of the pangs felt by a broken heart.... regards, sudhir |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Butterflies~ My dear, dear, friend, I think we are on the same wavelength today. Sometimes it's a little tough, isn't it? Somedays I wonder why I even try to go on. But then I see friends like you, and I know that I am not alone. I do have the strength to go on, and there are more things that I have yet to do - both for myself and for others. And it is so wonderful to know that there are others who care. (Thank you for your reply to my poem!) I want you to remember that there is someone out here who cares about you, too! With a friend like you, I may still be sad every now and then, but my moments of happiness are even brighter. This is a beautiful poem, my friend. The well of my soul has been tapped dry The final tear drop has joined the sea Never more will you see me cry The salty waters rise and swallow me As long as I can help it, I won't let those waters drown you. Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
You have explored two different truths in this poem-one being the different meanings tears can take, the other the pain of human betrayal-and did wonderfully with both of them. Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
its so hard to understand how something that starts out so sweetly can end and cause so much bitterness and pain.. your penned it with your sweet tears my SS stronger with every tear stronger with every verse love ya girlie-gator  There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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chibi_dragon Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 58 |
Wow. This some sad work. Sad but to the point and so unfortuantly real. --Chibi |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Seems to me to truly know happiness we must go through some times of unhappiness...but does it have to happen so often??? Wonderfully written BAF! jwesley |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I agree with the others Butterflies...there is someone for you, someone who will stick it through to the end...It's sad to see anyone hurt so, but I always find that it increases the ability to express with different styles of language, words well known to poets. The hurt may still be there but you have an avenue of relief that others don't have and it helps....keep on writing I will be looking for you. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A powerful poem BDC... I really don't know what to say in the face of such emotional pain except big hug.. take care my friend. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
What heartfelt emotions you emanate here. Wonderful piece. Things always look up when you aren't expecting them to. Hang in there. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* Thank you for your always kind replies...and yep I agree, he'll come...I just hope I'm home when he does Sudhir* Many thanks, I always look forward to hearing from you~ Terry* How very sweet of you, it does appear that our moods are in sync...when we hit a high note everyone better watch out  Thank you so much my friend~Elizabeth* Why thank you, a very high compliment from you and I appreciate it~ J.M.* Yep...but as a wise sister told me once...why ask why Besides...now my muse has something to write with. Thank you sweet sister~Chibi* Real.......yep unfortunately so but I thank you for reading and your comments~ jwesley* I think that it's so the good times look that much better thank you for reading~ethome* Awe thanks, how sweet you are and I wouldn't have missed the trip that brought me to the saddness for anything, Thank you for your kind comments~Brian* Any reason for a hug is a good one Thank you from the bottom of my heart~Eloise* Thank you...I'll stop expecting so it will come sooner your comments mean alot and are very kind~ |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Butterflies, What an emtional piece. It brought tears to my eyes. As amazing and wonderous love can be.. it can be so painful. I have been there in the past. Don't loose faith in love... I have emerged a stronger person and now have an amazing man who loves me completely. I know you will too. rosepetals25 |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Butterflies, this really struck an emotional cord in me. My heartbreak and betrayal was over twenty years ago but the pain as real today as it was then. Your pen has served you well with this one my friend. Wishing you comfort and peace, Juls |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Butterflies_dont_cry, Butterflies are not suppose to cry, but I see that they do. A very nice writing that you have done Butterfly. |
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Richard McDonald Junior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 29Queensland, Australia |
How quickly things can change from bliss to pain. Lovely poem withh deep felt emotion. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, You hit home with this one my friend. Tears stream down my face as I try to type this reply. So many meanings those tears can have. You have expressed them well, Butterfly. Fly forth free . . . I will be right there by you. Great writing!! Take care, Sweets. **AW HUGS** LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Very good poem, Butterflies. I could feel your emotions flowing through the paper. Thanks for sharing! Peace, Nathan Nathan |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oh, Butterflies, this was so heart wrenching. Yet there was also strength in is. I absolutely loved it. Beautiful work, my friend. --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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cathybohannan Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 140Paintsville,KY |
LOVELY POEM, IT WAS A PLEASURE TO READ IT. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Bdc...I have shed those same tears, but I have to tell you I found a new and joyous love, and I cry no more. This is such a wonderful way to let go of the pain...know we are here with open arms and warm hugs for you. never say never |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
men are pigs women are evil and love stinks! no...we know better than that...but, for the poet, sometimes it can feel strangly good to be put upon by love. Just don't dye your hair black (lol) and keep smilin' BDC. Tony |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
This is wonderful! Here is my shoulder to catch them and keep them close to my heart for you! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ Though sorrow may fill your pen right now ... it will eventually pass and I'll look forward to the joy of your new ink ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
RP* I shall never loose faith...thank you very much for your kind reply~ Juls* Some hurts are never forgotten are they...the ones that cut deep. Many hugs to you for your heartache and thank you for reading~ BC* If only I WERE a butterfly...never another tear to fall past my lashes...what a lovely thought though, Thank you so much for your sincere reply~ Richard* A very fine line isn't there....thank you from my heart for your replies~ L.W.* Awe sweetie...no tears. Yes we will fly...and when we do everyone better stand back...the whirlwind is likely to blow their hair back Thank you my dear friend~Nathan* Thank you so much for reading and your reply~ TA* I've missed you around here......so glad to see you back, Thank you very much for your sweet reply~ Cathy* Thank you, I've enjoyed your posts and welcome you once again to Passions~ Paula* I'm so happy to hear that you have found a love to heal the pain....Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me~ Tony* A blonde I am and a blonde I will stay...lol (shhhhhhh don't let out the secret) Thank you for giving me a smile today~Insect* Awe.....how sweet you are...your poor shoulder though...better wear a raincoat! Thank you for your ever sweet replies~ Marge* I sure hope so.....my pen seems to stay BLUE...I'm looking for a new one Got any to loan??? Even when I am in a joyous mood my pen doesn't seem to capture it...lol Thank you from the bottom of my heart~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
My dear sweet friend, such love, such pain! You know that I feel every one of your tears. The clouds of regret will clear and I know that the well of your soul is not yet dry. Excellent writing my friend, take care! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Mark Bohannan says it beautifully. Swim, never stop, or you will never find. I loved this. Jenn E |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Hey---that Jenn E is one smart girl huh???????lol good morning sis.....just passing through for one more read. |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
Oh I do love this and the way you express..... michael g |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Eagle* Oh Thank you my sweet friend...my butterfly catcher JennE* I'm getting pretty good at the doggy paddle Thank you so much~Mark*.....lol..well you know that your words always mean alot to me sooooooo she did real good Michael* Thank you from the bottom of my heart~ |
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