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Kimber New Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 8Edmonton,Alberta,Canada |
"Just a kiss" he said. "Nothing more" he said. As he looked down into her eyes, he knew it was... "Just a kiss" she said. "Nothing more" she said. And as she gazed up into his eyes, she knew it was... Just a lie. "Don't leave me" he begged. "I ask for nothing more" he cried. "I'll stay with you" she whispered. "I want nothing more" she answered. She passed away in his arms that night. From all across the world you could hear the scream of anguish and pain. He didn't say goodbye. He didn't know how to let her go. He kissed her, nothing more. He will forever, stay with her, nothing more. |
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Dragon's Soul Junior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 25 |
Very powerful and heart wrenching I love it |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
welcome to Passions ...what a sad heartbreaking first post.< !signature--> never say never [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 07-31-2000).] |
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Kimber New Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 8Edmonton,Alberta,Canada |
Thank you for your responses, I share my poetry with friends only but you can never be sure if they really like it or if they are just being a friendly. Thanks again. |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
Welcome, very well writen, I love the pace.. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Kimber! Wow ... a powerful and thought-provoking read. Had to scoot back and read a second time! This has a unique flow that works well with your words ... nicely penned!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Welcome To Passions!! This was so sad and beautiful at the same time...the feeling packed into this piece was amazing. Thank you so much for sharing it with us and I'm looking forward to more in the future~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well hello......do I ever like the way you have put that beautiful little piece of poetry together...powerful but sad ending. well done! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Welcome to Passions and I must say that your first post was a great choice. It is so filled with the sadness and love. This tore at my heart and you brought that out through your pen. GREAT WRITE. |
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chibi_dragon Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 58 |
Wow. Very much like another poem that I read, that was in the Corner Pub. Only this one was from the girl POV. --Chibi |
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chibi_dragon Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 58 |
Wow. Very much like another poem that I read, that was in the Corner Pub. Only this one was from the girl POV. --Chibi |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
an extremely adept debut to passions. Welcome. I look forward to reading more. Unrequited love sucks. |
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Eddie de Jong Junior Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 27 |
WOW, what power!! Well done. |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Welcome to Passions, Kimber! You said so much with so little. I liked the format and the impact that it had. Anything that makes me ponder is always a treat! Well done! I hope you enjoy your time here. Trevor. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful |
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