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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2000-08-17 02:16 PM


I ate a rat!
I ate a rat!

But the rat squealed on me
I ended up with a Delhi tummy

I ate a rat
Maybe
    the rat, he ate me!

The rat ate me!
The rat ate me!

Me and my big, fat, round, tummy.
Oh! The poor yesterday's healthy me
was today's poor skinny sick me!
Me and my poor skimmed tummy.

And then...
And then,

I ate a cat!
I ate a cat!

The cat followed the rat inside me
The cat, she ate the rat inside me

Oh yes, the cat was my pied piper
Oh yes, my tummy was the city of Hamelyn

The cat helped me!
The cat helped me!

But I did not eat a fish that
    I had promised to the cat,
      her food, favourite catfish.

Not at all did it help my tummy!
For the cat was simply too heavy
Heavier than lead, weighed my tummy
Almost in a bursting spree, was me.

And I burst!
And I burst!

Into squeals of tickled laughter
As the rat inside the cat began
  to squeal.

I laughed, I laughed, I laughed.
I laughed as loud as loudness itself
I laughed as much and as far as I could

And then...
And then,

I cried, I cried and stayed in a cry
For my tummy exploded like a balloon
And there lay exposed, I -
                       a dead baboon!

=== a pure fun poem, find a meaning if you may ===
=== please tell me if you like it or loathe it ===


© Copyright 2000 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
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1 posted 2000-08-18 07:02 AM


Sudhir, hehe this was cute  
enjoyed it !

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
2 posted 2000-08-21 06:35 AM


Thanks Maree, glad that you enjoyed...

regards,
sudhir

Christopher
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since 1999-08-02
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Purgatorial Incarceration
3 posted 2000-08-21 06:56 AM


Uhmmm... Sudhir... I'm scared now! LOL

Just kidding, actually this was a very interesting poem. (Though I'm glad I haven't eaten yet...)

I can see this as an overall metaphor, but the fringes are a little bit frayed as if I don't have the whole picture/story here. I'll have to give this some thought.

But not boring, I'll give you that!

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
4 posted 2000-08-23 04:27 AM


Chris, are you now finished with your thinking... may I be honoured with what you have thought... thanks  

regards,
sudhir

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