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Christopher
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0 posted 2000-06-18 02:31 AM



I was reading an article that suggested that repetition in poetry was a good thing. They suggested that it created a somewhat hypnotic effect on the readers.


What y'all think?

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Poet deVine
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2 posted 2000-06-18 02:52 AM


I love it, but it has to be done just right for good effect. I have tried using it myself. Sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn't.

Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"



Christopher
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3 posted 2000-06-18 04:01 AM


The following is an example of a poem where I once used this very same technique. I recieved many good responses commenting on that very same thing. What think you?


initials
   of each  pain
   are inscribed
   on her gilden
   soul
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted

  
memories
   shelled  away
   buried deeply
   no remnant of
   then
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted


hopeless
   is the dreary
   prospect  now
   of living out
   life
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted


forsaken
   dreams into a
   charnel stile
   housing of no
   hope
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted


revealed
   futility upon
   one faithless
   man bestowing
   lust
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted


continue
   though  never
   will be shown
   traitorous or
   true
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted


violated
   the  once she
   believed real
   is the  story
   love
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted


illusory
   the masque is
   portrayed her
   face a  smile
   faux
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted

  

  
  
  

Temptress
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4 posted 2000-06-21 02:02 AM


While I enjoyed the poem I think the effect would be better with your repitition scattered...not used after every stanza. Thats not an expert opinion of course. Just my own tastes.   I guess I'm saying its too much repition for lil ole me.  


Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"



Irie
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5 posted 2000-06-23 03:51 AM


I say it depends on the poem and what is being repeated.
Just my two cents worth!

~Sheri

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6 posted 2001-08-09 01:13 PM


I get bored with repitition and eventually begin skipping the repeated lines... I mean, I already know what it's going to say, right?

You are more than the sum of what you consume
Desire is not an occupation
-Nicole Blackman/KMFDM

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7 posted 2001-08-13 07:46 PM


Properly used... what better way to stress a point. Or even better, to create a memorable few lines that brings the reader back again and again in memory, long after the poem is tucked away. But... as with everything, moderation is the key... as well as strategic placement. At least that's my humble opinion... for what it's worth.
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8 posted 2001-08-14 08:59 AM


Opinions here are always welcome Moonshadow...and sometimes..though not often in my own op, repetition can work...

K

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9 posted 2001-08-26 09:37 PM


If you repeat a line but use it differently as far as context is concerned then repitition can actually be quite clever.  For example, using homynyms, or sometimes words with different meanings, can allow repitition to be used very creatively.
Also repitition is a great technique if it is altered somehow at times, for example, you could repeat the line a few times and then change it here or there slightly, to create a different effect.  Like the repitition can be the entire line, minus a word.
Repetition is a poetic technique, just like rhyme, meter, metaphor, etc.  Used correctly it can enhance poetry a great deal.

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