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Lone Ranger
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since 2000-04-16
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Salvador , Bahia , Brazil

0 posted 2000-04-16 12:39 PM




                       Inside

Why?
Do I keep on suffering like that
I've given up the fight
But my heart just can't forget

I felt the laughter
The joy and the pain
But after all that I have done
I think it was in vain

My friends try to judge me
Try to tell me what to do
I should've listened to my heart
Instead of listening to you

It's not like I can explain
What is in my soul
But with this wound inside my heart
Where can I go?

I feel like I'm lost
A soul in the crowd
I am filled with words
I just can't speak aloud

The truth is
I don't know what to do
I'm looking for a savior
But no one seems to be true

God please help me!
Please show me the way
I am lost in a maze of thoughts
But I have nothing left to say


[This message has been edited by Lone Ranger (edited 04-16-2000).]

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State of constant confusion!
1 posted 2000-04-16 12:42 PM


Welcome to passions
Very impressive first post.
Nice flow to this piece.

Jeffrey

netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
2 posted 2000-04-16 12:48 PM


Hi Lone Ranger! Welcome to Passions.

I am fairly new myself.

This is a delightful poem that flows
wonderfully.  Thanks for sharing.

netswan

One Who Understands
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since 2000-01-20
Posts 251
Cedar Rapids, Iowa
3 posted 2000-04-16 12:53 PM


Great poem.  Welcome, I am looking forward to reading more of your pieces
serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

4 posted 2000-04-16 04:13 AM


Welcome to Passions--this is a great place to speak those silent words...looking forward to more...Nice work, here.
A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
5 posted 2000-04-16 04:23 AM


Sad to hear your heart in so much pain   hope all gets better with time!I will pray for you and ask for healing of your heart



[This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (edited 04-16-2000).]

lucky
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since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
6 posted 2000-04-16 04:39 AM


Hay, sorry about that Ranger some of the guys around here arn't as "ROMANTIC HEARTS" as they appear. Not to worry though you'll have plenty of times to catch 'um. There's a lot of them that like to crawl out of the woodwork in the wee hours of the morning while your sleeping thinking they won't get theirs. Just remember their "Handles" then tomorrow you can hit them with... Breaker breaker 911 Romantic Heart on the loose.

(Romantic Heart, thanks for the Edit - Lucky)

[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 04-16-2000).]

Frank Bucciero
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since 2000-04-16
Posts 5

7 posted 2000-04-16 04:42 AM


i thought it was very deep!
nice work ranger

 

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho
8 posted 2000-04-16 04:50 AM


This is a very haunting and poignant poem. Deeply moving, and very well written.  I am so sorry about your sorrow.

Lone Ranger
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since 2000-04-16
Posts 92
Salvador , Bahia , Brazil
9 posted 2000-04-16 01:23 PM


Thank You All!!
You have no idea how good it is to see that my poems actually touch people's heart!!
I'll keep the good work , and honestly I hope that my pain doesn't lasts forever , even though it made me write this great poem...

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
10 posted 2000-04-16 02:11 PM


Welcome to Passions, Lone Ranger.  Nice entrance with this poem.  Great work!!  Well said....good flow and expression.  Looking forward to more...    

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Lone Ranger
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since 2000-04-16
Posts 92
Salvador , Bahia , Brazil
11 posted 2000-04-16 08:20 PM


I just edited this poem , improved it a little bit..
Hope you guys like it!


 

Poet deVine
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12 posted 2000-04-16 09:20 PM


Welcome to the family....I enjoyed reading your poem and look forward to more from you. Please check your email for a special welcome....  
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