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The Storm Within

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rainchild
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The Storm Within

The storms of life are ragging.
Strong waves of fear dash high.
I feel my spirit sinking low beneath
the crashing tide.
With each new wave my mind descends
down to a dark despair.
I feel the cords of grief and pain
clinging, holding me there.
I cry for help yet no one hears,
no person heeds my call.
Or did I even make a sound?
Should I try swimming to the shore,
or go ahead and drown?

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1 posted 04-15-2000 08:38 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Very interesting way of showing despair..most excellent writing skills

Jeffrey
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I'm sure everyone can relate to these feelings at one time or another. I love the sea imagery.

Denise
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Nice writing.  I can feel your dispair, yet hear your cry for help.  Very good job conveying your emotions.  Welcome to Passions!!  Looking forward to more.  

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I too can relate well to this.  Sometimes it's so hard to swim back to shore, isn't it? Powerful and well done work here.  

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RainChild~
A nicely written piece.
Raging storms can sometimes determine
our path by giving us challenges to
either fight against or flow with.
I liked the way you portrayed the struggle
in your writing.
Always swim to shore ...
there's an abundance of opportunity
waiting on the next wave of storm.
~*Marge*~


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