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To Let the Flaming Pain

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Martie
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To Let the Flaming Pain

A cup of tea,
from an old copper kettle,
and something to eat, she said
as things rattled and flew
from cupboards and drawers,
boxes, cans and jars.

He felt like a gentle,
powerful tornado
had picked him up.

All he had wanted was one beer,
and here he was watching
the fluid movement
of this fleshy woman
as she prepared him tea,
for Godís sake.

Wife and child dead,
house taken by the bank,
he had lived in his car,
long enough for the cash
to run out,
cash for gas and food
cash for boozeó
Iím floating over the pain boozeó
floating up and over,
and then, like someone holding him
by the seat of the pants,
dangling with arms and legs kicking,
dropped him
onto the hard cement
of reality, booze.

What a macabre dance
with the devil that was,
as the money ran out,
the hangover ran on,
and he was sick from the stale taste
of his own bewilderment.

Oh yes, he liked the tea
he answered her questioning eyes,
feeling awkward
with conversation
except to himself.

The words croaked
and a large swollen
infected feeling pushed
into his throat
and lodged there
making his eyes water.

Then she was kneeling
beside him
taking him by the shoulders
and enveloping him in the warmth
of her spongy arms
and big soft breasts.

Itís okay to feel the pain
she whispered into his ear.

He resisted at first,
sat stiff and tried to focus
on not feeling
but then he relaxed,
let his body be rocked,
let the flaming pain
tear at him, enfolded.

Thatís good, she said.    



[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 04-15-2000).]
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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1 posted 04-15-2000 06:32 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

Oh, Martie, this poem really tugged at my heart.  Very deep and much too real.  There's so much pain in this world.  Nurturing hurting people is something dear to my heart. You have painted a picture excellently vivid and cutting. It will certainly stay with me for a long time.  Very meaningful.  Thank you.


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Rosemary--Thank you for responding to this tale of the beginning of hope and one simple act of kindness...you are special.
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Oh, Martie, my sister~
You cradle compassion in the
warmth of your words.
This is such an endearing render.
Hope can be begun in the arms
of a hug.  Bewilderment brushed aside
with just a gleam of hope.
Release is so much easier engulfed
in a hug following a cup of tea.
Special hugs to you, my friend.
~*Marge*~


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4 posted 04-15-2000 09:09 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

It takes a very special person to write a poem like this. I have little doubt you would be the same way as the woman in your poem. Beautiful, Martie.
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Compassion just oozes from this, Martie. Very well written!

Denise
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Marge--thanks for the sister--quite a compliment!

Baladeer--You touch my heart with your words.

Denise--Thanks you for seeing compassion.
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It is one of the best feelings in the world to be able to help someone in such pain..such a vivid tale here, Marge.  I too believe you are a woman such as the one in this lovely poem.  

 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~
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Thank you Krista for the sweet reply to Marge...LOL--she's my sister, ya know.
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9 posted 04-16-2000 01:39 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Well, SIS ...
What a wonderful tribute to us both.
(Thank you, Krista)
Gosh ... this 'sister' stuff just grows
on ya'.
If I have my way ... AND I DO ...
I hereby declare that Martie and I are SISTERS. (Now ya' got one, sweetie !)

What a wonderful gift she's given me.
I will treasure the sistership with much love and affection.
What a glorious day this is !
~*Marge*~


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Martie ... your heart is shining again, in this piece ....
Very touching; very moving ....
Excellent


 "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind."
Maxwell Maltz
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Martie, I can not believe how much love radiates from this little gem. Such a vivid image of a  tragedy in one's life, with one person careing so much to give some needed love.

Parker
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Marge--A sister of the heart is the best kind to have--and I would be very honored to be yours...I call my sister in law my sister in love, because love is what it's all about.  I hope the sun is shinning for you today.

Hi Pepper--I sure am glad to see you reading this and what a nice response, thank you.

Parker--This is just a little fiction from my mind, but this truth exists everywhere and love is a very healing power...that is not fiction.
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Martie: Every now and then I sneak back and this brought a huge smile to my face as I imagined the pain and coldness leaving and the warmth filling every vein and the talk that must have followed and all because someone cared...Thanks love...it made me cry but thank heavens it's still ok to show someone how much you care..

HUSG
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RG--If this made you smile, then you have made my day!
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Martie, I am often asked how I can handle dealing with the subjects I've dealt with on a daily basis for the last twenty years.  My response is, that while I deal with so many unthinkable tragedies, I believe in the basic inate goodness of people.  You have given me a smile today my friend, for you have validated that statement with this wonderful poem.
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Very nice. I loved the discription.
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~Sighs and tears.
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