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serenity blaze
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0 posted 04-15-2000 04:25 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

Pleasure, pain & pity
lights in blink
    heart
of the city...
Hand in grasp,
breast to be stroked--
    furnace
smolders down below.
    Ashen coal
potential--stoked--
promise made...
promise broke.

    Silence.
My lips move in jest.
    Absence.
Wish you all the best.
    Restless.
(just like all the rest...)
    Substance.
(May I pass this test...)

Mumbling to myself, this prayer:
"let it be, just once, I'll swear..."
Hope + Bliss + Destiny
equals sweet serentiy...
I travel, MUST,
on to wit's end...
Sacred trust
I'll find you there.
(I will be the one in tears,
I'll be the one still waiting here.)
© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 04-15-2000 06:58 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie


    Silence.
My lips move in jest.
    Absence.
Wish you all the best.
    Restless.
(just like all the rest...)
    Substance.
(May I pass this test...)

Mumbling to myself, this prayer:
"let it be, just once, I'll swear..."
Hope + Bliss + Destiny
equals sweet serentiy...
I travel, MUST,
on to wit's end...
Sacred trust
I'll find you there.
(I will be the one in tears,
I'll be the one still waiting here.)

------------------

ooh I LOVE this one...very good...cool poem...
when you get to wits end...look for me...i live there...I ll leave a light on for ya  
sad but perfect poem of longing sweets.
i love the way you write out your thoughts...
each poem is like a little glimpse of your hearts diary...
love reading your heart (smile)
jm
tracie66
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since 01-18-2000
Posts 4587
Victoria, Australia


2 posted 04-15-2000 07:08 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

This was a captivating poem which I enjoyed reading.  
Tracie~


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks

serenity blaze
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since 02-02-2000
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3 posted 04-15-2000 09:25 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Janet Marie--how special you are to me...
             Your replies are always so
             touching...thank you from within
             twin soul...

Tracie66-----grateful, first, that you're not
             Tracie69!---(Keep reading, my
             life is very complicated!)
             Much Gratitude to YOu.
CMGrimm
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4 posted 04-15-2000 09:30 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

You've got a great one here serenity...a really cool poem indeed.  I truly enjoyed the read.

chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.


Parker
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since 01-06-2000
Posts 3135
... the old black rum


5 posted 04-15-2000 05:52 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

serenity, I really loved the style in this one and these lines speaks of such wanting passion, I really like......

Hand in grasp,
breast to be stroked--
    furnace
smolders down below.


Parker..
Jeffrey Carter
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State of constant confusion!


6 posted 04-15-2000 08:09 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

such a wide range of emotion in this piece
iit is almost like a journey through my mind

Jeffrey
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7 posted 04-15-2000 09:13 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This is very well written, serenity. Excellent title and exceptional poem....
Denise
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8 posted 04-15-2000 11:13 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very well done, Serenity. I enjoyed this!

Denise
serenity blaze
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9 posted 04-16-2000 04:34 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Chris--you have my gratitude...Thanx to you.

Parker-hey--thank you also m'friend.  And for
       the record--I wouldn't mind sweet lies
       from you--anytime at all you feel the
       call...Thank you for the smiles...

Jeffrey C--Great Big crushing Bear Hug!
       Thank you, gentle man...

M'dear Balladeer--always am I humbled by your
       praise...I bow to you in gratitude.

Denise--There you are, making me happy again.
       For that I'm ever grateful...

Lovely love to all....
wayoutwalt
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since 06-22-99
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TEXAS (it's all big)


10 posted 04-16-2000 04:37 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

o man im weary tonite this is such a good poem yuh

 All Day I Dream About Stanzas!!
NamelessOne
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since 04-09-2000
Posts 201
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11 posted 04-16-2000 05:43 AM       View Profile for NamelessOne   Email NamelessOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for NamelessOne

Exceptional poem Serenity,i did so enjoy it
Great work
Jim Hastings
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12 posted 04-16-2000 08:41 AM       View Profile for Jim Hastings   Email Jim Hastings   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jim Hastings

Very well written, it speaks volumes.

 It's fantasy. But if it contains a piece of me doesn't that make it as real as I am?

 
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