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Skyfyre
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0 posted 04-15-2000 01:45 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

How gently whispering the rain
          outside these dreaming walls,
Where starlit reaches fill the space
          behind the weeping sky,
How distant, now, the pulse of pain
          that in the darkness calls
To that which fades within the place
          behind my weary eye.

How sensual the very air
          that moves upon my skin;
A current stirred by only breath,
          the ghostly fingers press
A loverís touch upon my hair,
          and I am caught within
A vision of a tender Death
          surveying his success.

How deafening the silence rings
          when all thatís left to hear
Is that which marks the slow defeat
          of all youíve ever been;
What bitter tune the rhythm sings
           to this unwilling ear
That marks with ever slowing beat
            the dirge of final sin.

How tranquil shall the morning break --
            the one Iíll never see --
The world unceasing in its ways,
            while life moves swiftly on,
Unknowing shall the songbird wake
            to sing its melody
While eyes in seeming wonder gaze,
             unseeing, at the dawn.



Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest





[This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 04-15-2000).]
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Jeffrey Carter
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1 posted 04-15-2000 01:48 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

WOW! This is really beautiful writing with a rhythym unsurpassed.

Jeffrey
netswan
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2 posted 04-15-2000 01:51 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Sky - simply  - pure well written poetry.
Thank you --  

Teresa King
Michael
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3 posted 04-15-2000 02:27 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

You are gifted, Kess.  I know I am being redundant to say this is awesome but I have not words to do this piece justice.  Third stanza is a poem in itself.  Wonderfully done.


Michael
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4 posted 04-15-2000 09:40 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Exceptionally written.  You indeed have a gift.
Nan
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5 posted 04-15-2000 10:02 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Wonderful, Kess... Remember - You needn't be answerable to others - You need only please yourself...
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6 posted 04-15-2000 10:36 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

My dear you have a mastery of imagery! This is superb!  
Janet Marie
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7 posted 04-15-2000 11:52 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

How perfect is this poem
How superb is the flow
How talented and gifted you are
and now we all know (smile)

this poem is pure and exquisite...
and leaves me breathless and with quite a case of poet envy as well(smile)
exceptional work, always.
take care, jm

 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon


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8 posted 04-15-2000 12:50 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Wonderful Kess (I'm running out of words to describe your pieces these days!!)

Your gift for language continues to amaze me. . . excellent!!

The heart knows what the mind cannot see. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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9 posted 04-16-2000 06:08 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

And a poetic "leavetaking" it is. How beautifully sad! Umm, I'm trying to think of things to say here, but my breath was taken away. The rhyme scheme, slow and spaced lent a heavy pall of sorrow that I felt fit perfectly! Wow!
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10 posted 04-16-2000 06:20 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Sky, this is simply breathtaking!  A cocophony of rhythm and sensation that is music to my heart!


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11 posted 04-16-2000 06:30 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Skyfyre,
Your writing is impressive
And very very expressive.
Enjoyed the read. Sy
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12 posted 04-16-2000 11:34 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent writing, Kess!

Denise
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13 posted 11-08-2000 11:13 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

adding to my library file  
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14 posted 02-19-2001 05:18 PM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

Great writing Skyfyre...
~coco~
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