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Skyfyre
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0 posted 2000-04-15 01:45 AM


How gently whispering the rain
          outside these dreaming walls,
Where starlit reaches fill the space
          behind the weeping sky,
How distant, now, the pulse of pain
          that in the darkness calls
To that which fades within the place
          behind my weary eye.

How sensual the very air
          that moves upon my skin;
A current stirred by only breath,
          the ghostly fingers press
A lover’s touch upon my hair,
          and I am caught within
A vision of a tender Death
          surveying his success.

How deafening the silence rings
          when all that’s left to hear
Is that which marks the slow defeat
          of all you’ve ever been;
What bitter tune the rhythm sings
           to this unwilling ear
That marks with ever slowing beat
            the dirge of final sin.

How tranquil shall the morning break --
            the one I’ll never see --
The world unceasing in its ways,
            while life moves swiftly on,
Unknowing shall the songbird wake
            to sing its melody
While eyes in seeming wonder gaze,
             unseeing, at the dawn.

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 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest





[This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 04-15-2000).]

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Jeffrey Carter
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1 posted 2000-04-15 01:48 AM


WOW! This is really beautiful writing with a rhythym unsurpassed.

Jeffrey

netswan
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2 posted 2000-04-15 01:51 AM


Sky - simply  - pure well written poetry.
Thank you --  

Teresa King

Michael
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3 posted 2000-04-15 02:27 AM


You are gifted, Kess.  I know I am being redundant to say this is awesome but I have not words to do this piece justice.  Third stanza is a poem in itself.  Wonderfully done.


Michael

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4 posted 2000-04-15 09:40 AM


Exceptionally written.  You indeed have a gift.
Nan
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5 posted 2000-04-15 10:02 AM


Wonderful, Kess... Remember - You needn't be answerable to others - You need only please yourself...
Poet deVine
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6 posted 2000-04-15 10:36 AM


My dear you have a mastery of imagery! This is superb!  
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7 posted 2000-04-15 11:52 AM


How perfect is this poem
How superb is the flow
How talented and gifted you are
and now we all know (smile)

this poem is pure and exquisite...
and leaves me breathless and with quite a case of poet envy as well(smile)
exceptional work, always.
take care, jm

 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon



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8 posted 2000-04-15 12:50 PM


Wonderful Kess (I'm running out of words to describe your pieces these days!!)

Your gift for language continues to amaze me. . . excellent!!

The heart knows what the mind cannot see. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Christopher
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9 posted 2000-04-16 06:08 PM


And a poetic "leavetaking" it is. How beautifully sad! Umm, I'm trying to think of things to say here, but my breath was taken away. The rhyme scheme, slow and spaced lent a heavy pall of sorrow that I felt fit perfectly! Wow!
hsystems
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10 posted 2000-04-16 06:20 PM


Sky, this is simply breathtaking!  A cocophony of rhythm and sensation that is music to my heart!


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Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2000-04-16 06:30 PM


Skyfyre,
Your writing is impressive
And very very expressive.
Enjoyed the read. Sy

Denise
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12 posted 2000-04-16 11:34 PM


Excellent writing, Kess!

Denise

Janet Marie
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13 posted 2000-11-08 11:13 AM


adding to my library file  
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14 posted 2001-02-19 05:18 PM


Great writing Skyfyre...
~coco~

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