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Marge Tindal
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Thunder rolls within
               Chasm of earth filled with sound
Thunder resounding

~Marge Tindal~ 2000



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Marge,
Great job!!!  The thunder is definitely powerful and awesome.  Well said!!!  I like it a lot.  


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You're very good at these, Marge!

Denise
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LoneWolf~
Thank you ... yes, it's quite
a reverberating experience.

Denise~
Thank you.
They like me !  
Somehow they cause me to look
with simplistic clarity at the
events of nature.
They just intrigue me.
~*Marge*~



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Don't know much about haiku, but you sure packed a lot into this little poem!


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Neato, Marge....

You're really enjoying these - You might consider sharing some with Beki Reese - She's the all time haiku champ...

I'm sure she'd love to read yours too..
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Jason~
Thank you.
I've sent you an e-mail on
the adventures of Haiku-ing !  
Enjoy ... and welcome to Passion's.

Nan~
Thank you ... I've been reading
and commenting on Beki's Haiku.
I do enjoy doing these ... they are
just so fascinatiing.
Thanks for the thoughts.
~*Marge*~


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Thunderous, Marge, Simply thunderous.  Great Job.

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INclan~

Thank you Haiku friend
Wonderful greetings you write
Haiku is alive

It is nice to see your enjoyment.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


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Very intriguing Marge....I can smell the rain

Jeffrey
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A stormy experience with this one.
Marge the talent you possess just astounds me and these are just fabulous.  
Tracie~


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Jeffrey~

Ah, and the prelude
To the roar of thunder set
Strikes me with wonder


Tracie~

Astounding thunder
Sent by stormy messenger
Roars across the sky

*Thank you both for enjoying this
and for letting me know.
~*Marge*~



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Hold on, O Guru of Haiku!

  THOR APPLAUDS IN GLEE!!!!

i've missed y'much m'mum.....
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Serenity~
Girl .. you bring a ray
Of sunshine into my morn
Serenity ... me !


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a suggestion,Marge...maybe you should use "loud roars" in the first line rather than "thunder"...after all,you have used thunder in the third line and since we all know how valuable words are in haiku,why repeat them? ")

a suggestion only...after all,i am only a budding haikuist myself!
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'budding haikuist'

Your suggestion of
'loud roars' within
sounds to me like it's almost lunch time.
(and that wouldn't be a correct 5-syllable count)

Now if you meant
'loud roars' rolls within
(that would be a tongue twister)

Thunder rolls ... and then does it again
thusly ... Thunder resounds.
Some things just bear repeating to this poets mind.
  
Since we all know it's not the word count that makes the Haiku format ... it's the syllable count, I would think that repetition of a word is most acceptable when it adds to the dimension and clarity of the Haiku.

Thank you so much for your kind observations.
~*Marge*~



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