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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2000-04-14 04:03 PM


    Hot chocolates and a tuna sandwich

Two hot chocolates and a tuna sandwich.
Set there between two people bewitched.
They ogled and stared at each others eyes,
And whispered across invisible vies.

Each and their outgo walked on a rainbow.
A scenario structured of shadow.
They could not believe or savor the true,
This meetings impromptu out of the blue.

Hands crept across the table in reach.
Souls stretching out in lovers beseech.
Illusions barrier still held the stream,
Of the real and the end of each dream.

Their fingers did touch to nova the night.
And feelings did flare the brightest of bright.
The sound was a sigh like a babies new cry.
And that was the hold, of impossible lie.

Their rainbow dissolved into distant adore,
As each sank back into dreams once more.


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Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2000-04-14 07:43 PM


Sy,
I never knew that a tuna sandwich could be so romantic, but I guess anything's possible.
But I do know I enjoy all your poems
Liz

Martie
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2 posted 2000-04-14 07:59 PM


Sy, I really love the idea of this--it is romantically beauiful...and distant adore I understand.
Denise
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3 posted 2000-04-14 08:31 PM


This is very romantic, Sy!

Denise

Poet deVine
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4 posted 2000-04-14 08:42 PM


Though I loved your poem, I have to say, I don't like tuna..could it be a grilled cheese instead?  
netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
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5 posted 2000-04-14 09:22 PM


hahahah, this was clever and delightfully
funny ----  I never knew that"sorry charlie"
had it so good.

Teresa King

Nan
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6 posted 2000-04-14 09:29 PM


"Their rainbow dissolved into distant adore..."

I like it.... and I like Hot Chocolate too...

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
7 posted 2000-04-14 11:39 PM


Elizabeth,
Oh yes tuna can be romantic. Glad you liked the poem. Love Sy

Martie,
Thank you so much for the understand. *L*

Denise,
Thank you dear. *L*

Poet deVine,
Sorry this one is strictly tuna. *L*

netswan,
Glad you enjoyed the sandwich.

Nan,
Thank you and me too on the hot chocolate. *L*

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
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Illinois
8 posted 2000-04-15 12:33 PM


Ooh hot chocolate! YUM!  Tuna I could eat, but don't care for it much anymore.
Romantic with or without the tuna on this one  

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
9 posted 2000-04-15 08:34 AM


WhtDove,
Thank you for the nice comment, I thought everyone liked tuna? *L*

Janet Marie
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10 posted 2000-04-16 11:13 AM


Their fingers did touch to nova the night.
And feelings did flare the brightest of bright.
The sound was a sigh like a babies new cry.
And that was the hold, of impossible lie.

Their rainbow dissolved into distant adore,
As each sank back into dreams once more.
--------------
SY
I ADORE this poem!!
this is perfect...
what a perfect moment in time you have drawn for us here.
this goes on my fav by you list
take care, jm

 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon



RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
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11 posted 2000-04-16 11:23 AM


Sy: I've tried many different combinations in my time but tuna stuffed with chocolate is a new one..LOL  but if it has that effect, I'm game..  

HUGS

ps: Actually...if you added some mushrooms stuffed with stilton, some crisp lettuce and some toast lightly fried in garlic and fresh cream served with a little dill...it's growing on me...oh my!

[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 04-16-2000).]

Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
12 posted 2000-04-16 11:51 AM


Lovely .... and yes, very romantic ..
And I love tuna, Sy .....  

 "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind."
Maxwell Maltz

Seymour Tabin
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Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
13 posted 2000-04-16 04:19 PM


Janet,
You are so sweet, what a wonderful comment. *L*

Rainbow,
I think I would really have dreams after that tuna sandwich. *L*

Pepper,
Thank you sweet, you are a joy. *L*

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho
14 posted 2000-04-16 04:48 PM


Ah, sigh - isn't it a shame when you open your eyes and discover you've been dreaming - with those loving eyes still in your brain, and tuna sandwich haunting your taste buds!  Oh, man!

And of course, if you were awake, it's even worse at the end.

Yes, romantic and sweet.  Good title, too!

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