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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 04-14-2000 08:15 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Calling All Free Versers

Song of meter, song of rhyme
Marching Ďcross the page in time
Not too fast and not too slow
Easy does it as we go

Some of you hate structured verse
You think itís the very worst
I can think of worse than this
Itís a day without a kiss

Let me have my kind of fun
Now and then a little pun
I can add a flair to rhyme
Make it march in double time

Double time, double time, double time now
I can write in double time about a purple cow
A little rhythm, little beat, a verse that isnít free
A song that isnít music, that is good enougfh for me

and what is the purpose to all this, you ask?
itís just to prove
how absolutely silly
structured verse is
You gotta make it rhyme
and to force it to rhyme with ďnowĒ
you start writing about
a purple cow
and everyone knows
there is no such thing as
a purple cow

Free verse is free
and it is not silly
it is serious
itís intellectual
itís limitless
bound only by the size of the paper
or the number of mega bytes in your hard drive
whichever comes first
so you see, itís infinite
the possibilities are infinite

so from now on
itís free verse for me!

so to all you ďfree-versersĒ
(is that what you call yourselves?)
I apologize
for ever having written a rhyme

or a meter, for that matter
for meter doesnít matter
and neither does rhyme or time
and rhythm should be banned

but somehow itís so......
itís so.......
itís so....

natural

Ďcause I got rhythm in my blood
and all efforts at free verse have been in vein
(thereís that pun I mentioned)

so please forgive my silly verses
and I will forgive your freeness


and I do truly forgive you

for your lack of rhythm,
your lack of rhyming
lack of chiming
lack of timing
lack of parameters
and pentameters
and all the other wonderful things
that are missing
in free verse

I promise
Iíll overlook
it all


Elizabeth Santos
A Note:
Dear poet friends. I apologize for not having time these days to respond to your comments on my poems. Often a poem will slip to a back page and I don't like to bring it to the front, so I don't respond, but I always read your comments and appreciate them.






[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 04-14-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
netswan
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1 posted 04-14-2000 08:22 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Cute way to put thoughts on paper.
I don't write in any structured
way, just get on paper what I want
to say, It may rhyme it may not. It might
have rhythm, probably an accident that
was bound to happen.  

As a newbie in these forums, I am certainly
enjoyin'  Glad you said "NOW" so it will
rhyme with cow, cuz you would have been
deep trouble if you chose purple or orange
instead.

Fun stuff, thanks.

Teresa King
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 04-14-2000 08:44 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
There is nothing to forgive,
We live the way we live.
Weather it be rhyme or free,
Is strictly up to thee.
Love Sy
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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3 posted 04-14-2000 09:27 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Oh but Elizabeth...I love them both and think, that written right, rhymed poetry is every bit as beautiful as free verse. The key is to not force the rhyme, but rather let it flow on its own.

I can write in rhythm
Put words in structured rhyme
Sound just like the poets
That graced another time
I can dabble days in Sonnets
Do a Ballad or Haiku
Put my words in differnt forms
And read them all to you

But, in freeflowing words
I offer up
my heart
inked onto paper
where they have a life
all their own.
It is in freeverse
where there are no bounds
that my passions flow
freely
taking you
along for the ride.
Cerenity
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4 posted 04-14-2000 09:40 AM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi Liz,

No matter how you write my dear is perfectly fine with me I love it anyway you put it. Now one of the first things I ever read of yours was about a purple cow I thought there was purple cows that drank bad water, hehehe

Cerenity
Martie
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5 posted 04-14-2000 10:37 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

What is all this nonsence
about the use of rhyme
and what is it that captures
the reader every time

It's Liz with all the treasures
that she holds in her heart
and gives to us so freely
in rhyme or free impart

So if we can be silly
and write of purple cows
then can't I freely laugh
about my cat, is that allowed

Just keep on writing words my dear
for I love every one
because you have such grace with them
and we all love ya, hon.

Meadowmuse
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6 posted 04-14-2000 10:52 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Yikes, Liz, you've even got Martie rhyming!    This was a clever bit, indeed, Liz...thanks for providing the poetically insightful chuckle.

~ Claire
Denise
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7 posted 04-14-2000 11:13 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Whatever form you choose, Elizabeth, it is beautifully done!

Denise
LoveBug
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8 posted 04-14-2000 06:25 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Liz, I'm glad to see that you've embraced free-verse. Do you remember our first few, especally the one about the beetle?  

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 04-14-2000 07:35 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Teresa, Welcome to Passions. I was just clowning around here, because everybody knows how jealous I am of poets who write in free verse, something I have not mastered. And we do have purple cows where I live, but that's another story. Thanks for your comments

Sy, Thank you for your little poem, you know you have always been my inspiration

Hoot, Your magic pen works in all forms of poetry. You are one of the few who can write anything with passion, and even your responses are lovely

Cerenity, Yes, the purple cows are for real. Thank you for your lovely comment

Martie, Well, look at you! Rhyme and rhythm! I feel so proud to have inspired this rarity!
Thanks Martie for the lovely compliments

Claire. You are another one of those who successfully writes both ways. Thank you dear, for your remarks

Denise, Thanks for your sweet comments

Lovebug, How can I ever forget the Beetle poems! hehe But I do love Beetles.Glad to see you posting such lovely poetry

Liz
Lone Wolf
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since 03-16-2000
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10 posted 04-14-2000 08:31 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Liz,
Very unique approach on this one.  Enjoyed it tremendously!!!  You just pulled me right in and I just had to see where it would end up.  Lovely surprise!!!  


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
CMGrimm
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since 02-14-2000
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11 posted 04-15-2000 09:22 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Very cute poem Liz..

As for me,
I just want to be able
to express the words
that tumble
about my head
driving me insane
with sleeplessness
and making me weary
with fright
that someone
wont like
what I have to say.

And no matter how you do it...if it speaks to you...it's poetry.

chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.


Nan
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12 posted 04-15-2000 10:09 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

How now, purple cow..
What of your verse?
There's nothing worse
Than writing not
Those words you've got
Stored in your head
Just thought instead..
So free or rhymed
In metered time
Break out that quill
And write them still!!!...
Irish Rose
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since 04-06-2000
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13 posted 04-15-2000 02:46 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

I love the individualism of the forum and each one their own style, including this one. Go on with the writing!!

 Kathleen

Marge Tindal
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14 posted 04-15-2000 03:18 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Oh, dear Lizzie,
you threw me into a tizzy,
thinking you'd gone dizzy.

I recovered in time
to catch your flowing rhyme.
It warmed this heart of mine.

You've fallen in free-verse
it could NOT be worse
than having your pen run dry ...
now that would cause me to cry !

For somehow in your verse of rhyme
I find myself each and every time
and it is more than fine
if you explore
the evermore
of meter
cause it matters
and hearts you would shatter
if Lizzie didn't pen
her rhymes from within.

So keep the poems coming
we'll relish with delight
any and every thing
that you write.

So you're a 'structured rhyme-iac'
that's okay with me.
I like anything you pen
and that's a quip with glee.

Love you ...
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Elizabeth Santos
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since 11-08-1999
Posts 9405
Pennsylvania


15 posted 04-15-2000 04:18 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Lone Wolf, Was just having a little fun. Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you.

Chris,  If it speaks to you, it's poetry! Exactly! Thank you. (I see you are a "free verser")

Nan, Ms."rhyme and chime" herself. Thank you for your verse.My little bit of free verse, could have been much worse.

Irish Rose, I'll never stop writing, but gosh, wish I could write in free verse, too.!
Thank you for your lovely comment

Margie,
I was a little taken back
Your friend, the "sructured rhyme-iac"
You always give me such a thrill
With verses coming from your quill
You write in free or rhyme that's true
A "romantaholic" - that is you

Liz
Marge Tindal
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16 posted 04-15-2000 04:45 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Lizzie~
Guilty as charged !  
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

 
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