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angelswing
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0 posted 2000-04-14 08:08 AM


Heaven or hell ? – the choices we all must make, full version, (part 1 and part 2).

My eyes are blind,
My mind is numb,
My soul is down and blue,
There’s nothing left for me to do,
I feel so confused,
My heart is split between two worlds,
Torn straight down through the mid,
The cherubs stopped there holy song,
And flew away and hid .
The mist has come,
In clouds above,
The blanket covers me,
The truth is gone,
This can’t be love,
That’s come to set me free .
Angels guard the silent route,
Up to the glowing gate,
I can’t let temptation hamper me,
Or I’ll never reach my fate .
But what is this,
I have a doubt,
Growing in my head,
Don’t make me chose,
Which road to take,
Or I’ll never get it said .

My strikes have all been wasted,
It’s the bottom of the ninth,
The bowler’s spinning wildly,
And so’s my heavy mind,
This is it,
It’s gone to far,
It’s now a do or die,
I wish that I could end it all,
With one defining cry,
A call for good,
A call for right,
My vision is impaired,
The bases are all loaded,
The strong ball takes a curve,
It’s over in a millisecond,
My life,
The do or die,
At least I had a nice big swing,
My best,
A poxy try .

Written by Tom Baker.



 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .

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netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
1 posted 2000-04-14 08:32 AM


Wow, Tom, what a comparison!  Wonderful
poem -- with a twist for an ending.

I hope whatever is tempting you, doesn't win.

Thanks for sharing.

Teresa King

infinat3 sadn3ss
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 85
somerset england
2 posted 2000-04-14 09:40 AM


if its just a poxy try in the end , make sure you make people remember you , thats all you can ever do . and remember , hitler only made a poxy try and people still remember him .
angelswing
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3 posted 2000-05-04 09:20 AM


Thanks for your kind words, I am just finding lots of desisions that I have to make at the moment, but I know that if I go to low, I can at least go out with a bang .

 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .

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