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Your Empty Eyes

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lucky
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0 posted 04-14-2000 03:30 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for lucky



Well come as I was
in courage by a fiend to be gone this
journey never linking for a weak or so that it cold
get used this way it did too Iím so glad butt sad you there
yet your presents brings such relief to this aura vaginal draft
and purr puss of mist little chapter which was to leaf you
into a piece full come for table ground but if you no
thing like me you be tried of the same mold
contempt or airy voids that sneaks to
glory fly woke gather then tall
ants which draft tick
ally skewers art and graces
such in dived level souls with the
drudge airy of woke..! I can soy tan any
be leaf which is the truth of this fawn ally if own
lye manna festered threw a single palm or many foams
thy music your peach the very mass sagť of finessť
in appear ants and at tit lewd shod be in tart
con trash to ease kind of odor ease
very same will not rest pond
to a poets rule of dumb
which pears to be just act
ally what they lethal ridge ally
cordon wit newt protest or sin sure
as a mark of ally ants in this fare fate of
finessť... so if I woke at it yon enough
will fat make it add mire able odor
I weight for the voids to rule
ball looming nocturne
ally true in neat..?




[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 04-18-2000).]
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Jeffrey Carter
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1 posted 04-14-2000 03:46 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

simply marvelous

Jeffrey
Michael
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2 posted 04-14-2000 04:26 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

A wonderful poem and message.  Beautiful work, my friend.


Michael
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3 posted 04-14-2000 07:43 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Wounderful, great poem with loads of meaning, well presented as well, that just topped off a already marvalous poem with a cherry .


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 04-14-2000 08:18 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

EXCELLENT PRESENTATION!!!!
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 04-14-2000 08:27 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Lucky~
WITHOUT A DOUBT
one of the most beautiful works
I've ever seen on display here.

You've mastered the art.
Darn this is pretty !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Meadowmuse
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6 posted 04-14-2000 11:20 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

This is a beautiful piece of writing, Lucky. Tenderness, eloquence, pleasing to the eye...just lovely.

~ Claire
lucky
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7 posted 04-14-2000 01:37 PM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

First of all my special thanks to Michael as we both have been working with a different idea ďpoems within poemsĒ (check one of his masterpieces ďPRINCE OF EDENĒ already posted in Forum#6) I do have others already on the drawing board as Iím sure Michael does also, although you have to keep a close eye on Michael you never can tell when heís gonna drop one in. Iíve also seen others here at Passions who have similar talents and my hats off to them in their endeavors. Art is fun for me as so is poetry which is an art in itself, but you can ask Michael or myself__you put them together and you have a real puzzle, or in many cases a real mess. Many drafts are sometimes needed. As for myself, I hope to see a lot more of you book worms getting off the shelf.

Jeffrey,
thanks for the marvelous RE:

Angelswing,
alight... time for you to get off the shelves. Iíve seen you have some marvelous stuff yourself, but I want to see some of those cherries.

Hoot_Owl,
Iím not even going to begin to tell you all Iíve learned from you. In fact I need to do some computer house cleaning as I got the Owl_Hootiní all over the place... needless to say, lots of style, lots of grace.

Marge,
Your a little eager beaver and I donít think anybody can keep up with you and Iím sure youíve got that hot little quill churning up somethin. Your a sweet competitor and you keep me on my toes.

Meadowmuse,
Yea... I see you poking that little nose of yours out from time to time. Your not to shabby of a poet (for a pro) yourself.

And then thereís...
Sinatra, he just wants to surf the web looking for other felines felons and dream of innocent little Chickadees. Itís become a problem for both Rosemary and myself as he now demands to fondle the keys. Darn 15 pound fur ball I woke up to find 19 pages of what he was feline... all mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmms...
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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8 posted 04-14-2000 07:57 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

This is the most beautiful art work in poetry I have ever seen, along with being one of the very sweetest poems you've written, in my opinion, my dear one.
~ ~ ~
I wonder if anyone noticed that the red words make up a second poem in themselves?

Marge Tindal
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9 posted 04-14-2000 08:58 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Lucky~
Had to come back and treat myself to this
little beauty.  Interesting that you and Michael are doing the work on the 'poem within the poem'  

That makes for such a fascinating read.
That very thing was what made this work
stand out .. Would I have found it if
the words hadn't been done in red ?
Maybe not .. but as I often do .. I inspect
your work with a passion and so perhaps
I would have ...
This is without a doubt one of my favorite
of all time poetic works from you.
Worth all the effort you put into it ...
GUARANTEED !
I shared it with my co-workers today ...
it hangs on our ever-growing poetry board.
Thank you for delighting my day.
~*Marge*~


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Martie
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10 posted 04-14-2000 09:06 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Lucky, wow!...and to think I didn't see this earlier...this is wondrous and yes, Rosemary I did see the second poem, I promise, before you even said anything.  You are a gifted poet and we are all lucky to have you posting here.

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 04-15-2000).]
lucky
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11 posted 04-15-2000 04:55 PM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

Hello Marge,

So you just had to get a second look. Whatcha got cookin' girl..?

Martie,

This ain't Lenny's. Breakfast is served only once a day. Wake up and smell the bacon soon it will be lunch and you'll have to settle for a BLT (burnt li'l tidbits)
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12 posted 04-15-2000 07:49 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Simply wonderful!!

I can't tell you how excellent this is. . . the form, the writing, everything about this is wonderful!!

You have really outdone yourself with this one lucky. . .

--------------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

winterinblue
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13 posted 04-15-2000 10:53 PM       View Profile for winterinblue   Email winterinblue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for winterinblue

I've never seen a poem like this before.  It's really wonderful.
Lone Wolf
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14 posted 04-15-2000 11:25 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Lucky,
You have the talent in your hand.  this is marvelous!!!  Imaginative and extremely impressive.  Great work!!!  I sit in awe of you!!!  Simply wonderful words and form.  

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15 posted 04-16-2000 12:09 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Absolutely stunning!  You indeed have a rare and remarkable talent.  I am truly in awe.  

 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~
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16 posted 04-16-2000 05:07 AM       View Profile for kaleidoscope   Email kaleidoscope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaleidoscope

What a beautiful, loving poem!  And I mean beautiful in both senses. A masterpiece of a poem.

 
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