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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho 
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Well come as I was in courage by a fiend to be gone this journey never linking for a weak or so that it cold get used this way it did too I’m so glad butt sad you there yet your presents brings such relief to this aura vaginal draft and purr puss of mist little chapter which was to leaf you into a piece full come for table ground but if you no thing like me you be tried of the same mold contempt or airy voids that sneaks to glory fly woke gather then tall ants which draft tick ally skewers art and graces such in dived level souls with the drudge airy of woke..! I can soy tan any be leaf which is the truth of this fawn ally if own lye manna festered threw a single palm or many foams thy music your peach the very mass sagé of finessé in appear ants and at tit lewd shod be in tart con trash to ease kind of odor ease very same will not rest pond to a poets rule of dumb which pears to be just act ally what they lethal ridge ally cordon wit newt protest or sin sure as a mark of ally ants in this fare fate of finessé... so if I woke at it yon enough will fat make it add mire able odor I weight for the voids to rule ball looming nocturne ally true in neat..? [This message has been edited by lucky (edited 04-18-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
simply marvelous Jeffrey |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
A wonderful poem and message. Beautiful work, my friend. Michael |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Wounderful, great poem with loads of meaning, well presented as well, that just topped off a already marvalous poem with a cherry . With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one . |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
EXCELLENT PRESENTATION!!!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lucky~ WITHOUT A DOUBT one of the most beautiful works I've ever seen on display here. You've mastered the art. Darn this is pretty ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This is a beautiful piece of writing, Lucky. Tenderness, eloquence, pleasing to the eye...just lovely. ~ Claire |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
First of all my special thanks to Michael as we both have been working with a different idea “poems within poems” (check one of his masterpieces “PRINCE OF EDEN” already posted in Forum#6) I do have others already on the drawing board as I’m sure Michael does also, although you have to keep a close eye on Michael you never can tell when he’s gonna drop one in. I’ve also seen others here at Passions who have similar talents and my hats off to them in their endeavors. Art is fun for me as so is poetry which is an art in itself, but you can ask Michael or myself__you put them together and you have a real puzzle, or in many cases a real mess. Many drafts are sometimes needed. As for myself, I hope to see a lot more of you book worms getting off the shelf. Jeffrey, thanks for the marvelous RE: Angelswing, alight... time for you to get off the shelves. I’ve seen you have some marvelous stuff yourself, but I want to see some of those cherries. Hoot_Owl, I’m not even going to begin to tell you all I’ve learned from you. In fact I need to do some computer house cleaning as I got the Owl_Hootin’ all over the place... needless to say, lots of style, lots of grace. Marge, Your a little eager beaver and I don’t think anybody can keep up with you and I’m sure you’ve got that hot little quill churning up somethin. Your a sweet competitor and you keep me on my toes. Meadowmuse, Yea... I see you poking that little nose of yours out from time to time. Your not to shabby of a poet (for a pro) yourself. And then there’s... Sinatra, he just wants to surf the web looking for other felines felons and dream of innocent little Chickadees. It’s become a problem for both Rosemary and myself as he now demands to fondle the keys. Darn 15 pound fur ball I woke up to find 19 pages of what he was feline... all mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmms... |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is the most beautiful art work in poetry I have ever seen, along with being one of the very sweetest poems you've written, in my opinion, my dear one. ~ ~ ~ I wonder if anyone noticed that the red words make up a second poem in themselves? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lucky~ Had to come back and treat myself to this little beauty. Interesting that you and Michael are doing the work on the 'poem within the poem' That makes for such a fascinating read. That very thing was what made this work stand out .. Would I have found it if the words hadn't been done in red ? Maybe not .. but as I often do .. I inspect your work with a passion and so perhaps I would have ... This is without a doubt one of my favorite of all time poetic works from you. Worth all the effort you put into it ... GUARANTEED ! I shared it with my co-workers today ... it hangs on our ever-growing poetry board. Thank you for delighting my day. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lucky, wow!...and to think I didn't see this earlier...this is wondrous and yes, Rosemary I did see the second poem, I promise, before you even said anything. You are a gifted poet and we are all lucky to have you posting here. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 04-15-2000).] |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Hello Marge, So you just had to get a second look. Whatcha got cookin' girl..? Martie, This ain't Lenny's. Breakfast is served only once a day. Wake up and smell the bacon soon it will be lunch and you'll have to settle for a BLT (burnt li'l tidbits) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Simply wonderful!! I can't tell you how excellent this is. . . the form, the writing, everything about this is wonderful!! You have really outdone yourself with this one lucky. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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winterinblue Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 32 |
I've never seen a poem like this before. It's really wonderful. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Lucky, You have the talent in your hand. this is marvelous!!! Imaginative and extremely impressive. Great work!!! I sit in awe of you!!! Simply wonderful words and form.  Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Absolutely stunning! You indeed have a rare and remarkable talent. I am truly in awe. *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~ |
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kaleidoscope Junior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 38 |
What a beautiful, loving poem! And I mean beautiful in both senses. A masterpiece of a poem. |
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