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Imprisoned By My Guilt

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Jeffrey Carter
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0 posted 04-14-2000 12:21 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

I can't seem to find the words
      to say just how I feel
My pain is ever growing
      since they put you on that hill
I stop by to say I miss you
      almost every day
I pray that God above will soon
      take this hurt away

I can still see you lying there
      in a bloody heap
I wish that I could close my eyes
      and this memory delete
It haunts me every waking hour
      and in every wink of sleep
Ever losing grip on sanity
      no longer mine to keep

I would give most anything
     if I could change history
Cause in my heart I know that you
     should be here instead of me
In my cell, my private Hell
     locked inside my head
If I hadn't had too much to drink
     then you would not be dead

**********************************

Don't take this litterally I am not speaking from experience. It's just something that came to me

Jeffrey




[This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 04-14-2000).]
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1 posted 04-14-2000 01:20 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Sorry to darken the mood for anyone. Just thought you might enjoy. At least I hope you do.

Jeffrey
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2 posted 04-14-2000 01:24 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This was excellent writing m'friend, you've showed emotion in depth...perfect!!!

Might I offer you a late welcome??


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3 posted 04-14-2000 01:24 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Many familiar emotions and feelings here. Past memories can be a living hell when locked away inside.

 Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien
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4 posted 04-14-2000 01:39 AM       View Profile for WhiteNite   Email WhiteNite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhiteNite's Home Page   View IP for WhiteNite

Actually I like it... good read.

I think it takes more skill to express so vividly feelings that are not your own, than it does to express the ones you can write from first hand.



 "The storm rises up when the shadows descend
every beat of my heart every day without end
I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break
till theres no more to give if thats what it takes
I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed
I will lay down my life if thats what you need
every second I live thats the promise I make"

I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =)


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5 posted 04-14-2000 01:39 AM       View Profile for NamelessOne   Email NamelessOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for NamelessOne

wow deep stuff and the ending was a punch in the gut.well done jeffrey
netswan
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6 posted 04-14-2000 01:48 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Jeff, this is great. -- And a great message
to send out to people. I hope you can
PUBLISH it.  

 Teresa King
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7 posted 04-14-2000 02:44 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

devina.....thank you for your comment..I am not worthy of such praise   and I feel very welcome here at "home"

Eagle One....How True

WhiteNite...I thank you much

Thank you NamelessOne..as I said I'm not worthy

netswan...I agree that this is a strong message, but i'm not so sure that it is worthy of being published....but I certainly appreciate the compliment

Jeffrey
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8 posted 04-14-2000 05:02 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Oh My - the title alone sucked me into this once.  Excellent portrayal of guilt here.  Powerful words.


Michael
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9 posted 04-14-2000 08:38 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Micheal, That is truly a compliment coming from you. Thank you for making my day.

Jeffrey

[This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 04-14-2000).]
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10 posted 04-14-2000 10:03 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Jeffery...this is truly a wonderful piece of writing...nicely done  
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11 posted 04-14-2000 11:42 AM       View Profile for Friday   Email Friday   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Friday

Not written from experience.... well.. You did well without experience aswell... You are definitely a real poet...
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12 posted 04-14-2000 11:55 AM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Excellent work, Jeffrey - you definitely have  a gift!  It moves me to respond as you did to one of my poems.  I think you said something like, "don't take this the wrong way - but, I love you, man!"  Well, back at ya!


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13 posted 04-14-2000 04:58 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Thank you all for your compliments. They are greatly appreciated. I cannot tell you how it feels to finally feel like someone really cares enough to read my thoughts. I'd just like to say " I LOVE YOU ALL" Thanks for making this place feel  like HOME

Jeffrey
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14 posted 04-14-2000 06:20 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

This is an excellent poem about a subject that has touched each and every one of us at least once. Keep up the good work.

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
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15 posted 04-14-2000 06:20 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

I'm not sure that "enjoy" is a word I would use but certainly gives the feeling of anguish but I wonder if that is how someone feels when they are in that position...sorry, too close to home so made me think..

HUGS
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16 posted 04-14-2000 06:51 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Strong writing about a very sad subject.
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17 posted 04-14-2000 11:39 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Love Bug, It has touched way too many lives. Such a sad fact of society.

Rainbow, Now that I have had time to think about it I agree that "enjoy" was the wrong word in this situation. And I think this is the worst thing that could ever happen to anyone (just my opinion ) to know that you are partly if not wholly responsible for the death of someone you love all because you made a stupid mistake. I think if I was in this situation this would be pretty much how I felt. "In my cell, my private Hell, locked inside my head.

Martie,
Very sad indeed

Thank you all for your kind words. They are greatly appreciated.

Jeffrey
 
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