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A Box of Trojans and A Twenty....

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CMGrimm
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0 posted 04-13-2000 10:51 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for CMGrimm


I saw her standing there,
at the counter across the aisle
from the condoms,
staring right at me.

For just a moment
I thought I saw something
in her face, then
I saw her mouth move
to form the word "hi"

My eyes moved,
slowly,
down from her mouth,
down across her chin,
down the line of her neck
and across where
her tight white t-shirt
perfectly outlined her
full,firm breasts,
down to her bare, tan belly
where her fingers
nervously played with
a tiny silver ring.

I pulled my eyes
back up to meet hers
and caught her quickly
scanning the condom packages.
Then she looked at me
and smiled,
and turned and walked outside...

My heart was pounding
as I stepped up to the counter
with a box of Trojans
and a twenty...

Christopher M. Grimm  2000



 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.


© Copyright 2000 Christopher M. Grimm - All Rights Reserved
Jeffrey Carter
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1 posted 04-13-2000 10:54 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Nice dream Chris.....lol

Jeffrey
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2 posted 04-14-2000 01:55 AM       View Profile for tickle tickle   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for tickle tickle

safe sex is always the best way.....that you incorporated this into your poem and still evoked emotions...well done
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3 posted 04-14-2000 01:58 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

omanomanomanomanoman this killed me yuh and i too say wake up there CM  

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CMGrimm
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4 posted 04-14-2000 07:15 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

LMAO at yuh walt...it's not a dream, it's not a dream, it's not....okay...maybe it is, but that is for me to know and for you to only ponder....lmao.

Thanks Jeffrey and Tickle....nice to know someone appreciates...

chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.


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5 posted 04-14-2000 08:21 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Chris...your writing is excellent. I know I've said it before, but if you're not published, you certainly should be. Wonderful piece  
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6 posted 04-14-2000 11:16 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

this is so very well written,
when I saw the title,I was expecting something different...but this is so great...
the detail and imagery are perfect...i feel like i was there watching this happen, but also you have written the emotions as well as the imagery...i can feel the connection being made, and the anticipation,
very cool poem here.
take care, jm

 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon


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7 posted 04-14-2000 11:26 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Wonderful imagery ... and title ... I was expecting something quite different, myself ......
Perfect writing here, Chris .......

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8 posted 04-14-2000 11:38 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Chris, in this piece you're direct and subtle almost in the same breath. Finely writ, my dear!

~ Claire
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9 posted 04-14-2000 12:51 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Nice work, Chris!  The title pulled me in, and the poem made me glad I had taken the detour!


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10 posted 04-14-2000 02:17 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Great writing here--so real and imagery filled...well done!
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Thanks to all...
My dearest Ruth, Beautiful Janet, Wonderful Pepper, Fantasmicaly Beautiful CLaire, My man Troy, and Wonderful Martie...for your "Oh too kind" comments.  Im so glad you could read and enjoy.

Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.


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12 posted 04-14-2000 08:25 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Chris,
Writing like this takes talent!!!  I agree with Rith, get it published!!!  This was great!!  Must admit...it was the title that pulled me in.  Too funny!!!  

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CMGrimm
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13 posted 04-15-2000 09:16 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thanks Lone Wolf...I'm Trying...lol

chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.


Danny Holloway
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14 posted 04-15-2000 02:14 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

~~~~~~~~~Nice creative writing~~~~~~~
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15 posted 04-15-2000 02:20 PM       View Profile for NamelessOne   Email NamelessOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for NamelessOne

very well done CMGRIMM, i`ll be looking for part two..
CMGrimm
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16 posted 04-16-2000 10:47 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thanks Danny and Nameless.
Part two will probably have to be seen from the adult forum however...lol

anyway, thanks for the replies.

chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.


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