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I Yearn to Whisper Yes

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Martie
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(this is a rewrite of a poem posted some time ago)


I yearn to Whisper Yes


I yearn to whisper yes to you
under a tree somewhere in the old south,
a willow tree perhaps
who’s tears drift slowly, cleanly
layering my hair in green,
and you with scarlet eyes, sunset lit
would sing to me
a deep and true melody
that lingers like a sigh against my hair
in touching tribute to the curve that bares
the loving night.

We would be surrounded in sound,
a cicada concert
with our whispering breath,
then stars would dim
as moonlight opened soft
against the alabaster thigh
of forever.

And this memory
of a day that never was
will summon me on fragrant nights
noisy with other sounds
to weep this unspent passion
that yearns for you,
to close you into my warmth,
to whisper yes
somewhere under a tree
in the old south.


[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 04-13-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 04-13-2000 05:28 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Sweet...Romantic....I love this

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martie you are on a poetic roll, everything I read of yours is fantastic....great sighfilled images in this one...really beautiful  
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3 posted 04-13-2000 05:37 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Martie~ oh my gosh..... this is lovely...thank you for reposting it!   -SEA
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4 posted 04-13-2000 06:40 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

T'will be driving home from work tonight with a pleasant smile on my face.  A truly lovely poem my friend.  
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Marty ... this leaves us wanting an encore ... do you have to end it so soon ?

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Absolutely beautiful.  It is an amazing, colorful portrait of a romantic notion that we would all love to experience.  Thank you so much for sharing it.
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7 posted 04-13-2000 07:49 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Martie, this is I think one of my favorites of yours now.

"that yearns for you,
to close you into my warmth,"

there is something about those two lines that kind of excite me just a little too much. Great work.

Parker

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Jeffrey--loving is a good thing.

Corazon--What a wonderful thing to say, thank you.

Sea--I'm so glad you liked it.

Mike my friend, keep your mind on the road!

Rex Allen--I'll have to think about more...thinking....

Allimac--Yes, I think you're right--thank you.

Parker--Don't make me blush--you are so sweet.
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Very beautiful, Martie!

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Indeed very beautiful Martie!

 *Krista Knutson*

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11 posted 04-14-2000 12:02 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
Lovely, lovely, lovely.
You've sure got a way with
your thoughts lady.
Very romantic to be sure.
~*Marge*~


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You always manage to say it so much better than I--how I wish I'd written this!
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Denise and Krista-thank you for the beautiful.

Marge--You should talk...You are Ms. Romance.
Thanks for your lovely words

Serenity--Your writing is beautiful, but thanks for such a wonderful compliment!
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"as moonlight opened soft
against the alabaster thigh
of forever"

Gorgeous ... (sigh)
Your words constantly amaze me, Martie ...

 "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind."
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Martie...your word choices in this are excellent. SOme of the lines others have pointed out caught my attention right of the bat and made me say to myself"Gee...I wish I'd written that"
Everything in this piece works....it's like a beautiful patchwork quilt all tied together to create a masterpiece. Well done  
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