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All about you?

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Cassanova
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Turlock, Ca.


0 posted 04-12-2000 07:49 PM       View Profile for Cassanova   Email Cassanova   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cassanova

All about you


You chased away
   My dreams
With your priceless
  Fairy tales

You cheated me
  Of happiness
With adulterous ways
  You never denied

You locked my hopes
Inside an iron box
Threw the key into
"Gone-for-good"
Forever to be lost

But,
Recently you see,
Iíve learned a precious
  Bit of knowing:

Despite your
     Protestations,
     Your actions,
     And your wordsÖ

Itís never really been,
   All about you.





[This message has been edited by Cassanova (edited 04-12-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Jason Monarch - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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with you


1 posted 04-12-2000 07:51 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Cassanova~ Welcome!(great name) This is fantastic! -SEA
Poet deVine
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2 posted 04-12-2000 07:52 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Excellent poem! Welcome to the family.. please check your email for something special from your new friends at Passions!!!
hsystems
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3 posted 04-12-2000 07:58 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Cassanova, very nicely expressed - welcome to the family!


Troy

 Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry
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kitkat
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4 posted 04-12-2000 08:04 PM       View Profile for kitkat   Email kitkat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kitkat

Welecome to Passions
This was a very good poem
How true it is never"all about you"
Life and Love is a 2 way street.
Hope to read more of your creations
kitkat
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State of constant confusion!


5 posted 04-12-2000 08:08 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Welcome to passions!
I think you will see that most if not all of us are a kindred spirit.

good first post

Jeffrey
Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap


6 posted 04-12-2000 08:25 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Cassanova (Jason):

This piece is raw with emotion -- with loss and bitterness, pain and a scathing sense of betrayal -- and you conveyed all of these powerfully and well.

I must say my favorite part is the ending -- you wrapped it up nicely with a touch of hope for healing. It does the spirit well to hear a happy note after such a heart-wrenching dirge ...

Well done, new friend -- you are in good company here.  

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

Denise
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7 posted 04-12-2000 09:01 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Great poem, Jason! Welcome to Passions!

Denise
mete out
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8 posted 04-13-2000 06:17 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***cassanova,
wow.
this poem realy developed from a heart felt infringement upon your soul and self, into a very strong piece.
well done and welcome topassions.
i'll be watching...  


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


netswan
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9 posted 04-13-2000 06:33 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

BRAVO  - well said!
tracie66
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10 posted 04-13-2000 07:29 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Welcome~
This is a great poem and I loved the end line~ It's never really been about you
Tracie~


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks

weaubleau
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11 posted 04-13-2000 07:35 AM       View Profile for weaubleau   Email weaubleau   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for weaubleau

great way to introduce yourself!

you will love it here.  everyone is wonderful.

great writing.  hope to read more of it soon.  
A Romantic Heart
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12 posted 04-14-2000 04:45 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Welcome to Passions!!! Woa,,,could I ever feel this...big time relate! Great entrance!

 "Love is not love, till you give it away"
mianna86@yahoo.com


Danny Holloway
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13 posted 04-14-2000 03:51 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Welcome to Passions!  Nice writing.

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

Cassanova
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Turlock, Ca.


14 posted 04-14-2000 09:04 PM       View Profile for Cassanova   Email Cassanova   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cassanova

Oh WOW!

Thank you all for such a kind welcome... I was kind of hesitant to print anything up here...LOL, wasn't sure whether I'd get booed down or not!  

Thank you for making me feel welcome!


Jason
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15 posted 04-14-2000 09:27 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Jason~
Gosh, I like this so much.

Threw the key into
"Gone-for-good"

Very descriptive ...
you seem to have turned a corner with
'Itís never really been,
   All about you.'

Welcome to Passion's.
No 'boo' ... just welcome!
~*Marge*~


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INclan
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16 posted 04-14-2000 09:36 PM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Cassanova,

Welcome to Passions. A very good first post!!!  Indeed, Itís never really been,     All about you, Insightful!

INclan
Martie
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17 posted 04-14-2000 10:04 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Loved the last line...good writing..and welcome!
Parker
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... the old black rum


18 posted 04-15-2000 06:15 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Cassanova, this was a beauty, wish my first was this good. genius ending.

Parker
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


19 posted 04-16-2000 06:38 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

See Jason?

I TOLD you that you'd get a warm welcome!!! Your poetry is too good not to!!!
Welcome bud, enjoy and don't show me up, k?
Lone Ranger
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20 posted 04-16-2000 09:22 PM       View Profile for Lone Ranger   Email Lone Ranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Ranger

Cassanova , excellent name!
and what a poem!I should say that you have a gift...
keep the good work!


 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
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