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Poet deVine
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0 posted 04-12-2000 01:20 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Poet deVine

Her party was a huge success
she made her guests feel welcome
her food was amazing
but still she stood there
at the edge of tears
in the crowded room
full of friends
and family
inside
she cries
alone

Her husbandís company dinner
she wore a dazzling smile
he presented her on his arm
and inside
she cries
alone

The school play where her son
played a pumpkin that fell over
applause deafened her
and inside
she cries
alone

Two oíclock in the morning
sitting at the kitchen table
staring into the dark
alone
crying
inside




[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 04-12-2000).]
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1 posted 04-12-2000 01:27 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Poet~ I can truly relate to this sad beautiful poem. I know exactly what it means to wear that smile while crying inside.-SEA
Nicole
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2 posted 04-12-2000 01:44 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

ouch...this gouges eyeballs...

  It's sad that I can truly relate to this poem, but PdV, you've (as you always do) written such a poignant poem that will undoubtedly touch many.
Michael
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3 posted 04-12-2000 04:15 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

You know PdV, I'm not sure who this was written for but you of all people know I can relate well to this one.  (((HUGS))) from a friend.


Michael
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4 posted 04-12-2000 07:45 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

That emptiness inside, something missing.
Well captured, my friend.

Corinne
Nan
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5 posted 04-12-2000 07:51 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

So many people have this same feeling and don't know where to begin in resolving it... I surely hope this "She" found a way...
Marilyn
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6 posted 04-12-2000 07:52 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Wow Sharon. This is another great one. I too can relate to this piece. I am very lucky now, I am never alone like I was then. I hope everyone can find the peace that I have found in friends and in love.
WhtDove
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Ya did it! You got one posted! This is so sad     Man have I felt like that a time or two. When everything around you tells you that you should be happy, and yet you're screaming on the inside. Excellent job Sharon.
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8 posted 04-12-2000 08:19 AM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

There's a woman inside of you screaming to get out! Someone told me that recently and it's coming out....
we hope to hear more.

 Kathleen

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Oh Sharon...this is so very sad  
Danny Holloway
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10 posted 04-12-2000 10:29 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

~~~~~interesting and thought provoking~~~
clear message in the words which speaks well to the quality of the poem.


 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

Danny Holloway
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11 posted 04-12-2000 10:29 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

~~~~~interesting and thought provoking~~~
clear message in the words which speaks well to the quality of the poem.


 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

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12 posted 04-12-2000 11:01 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Great poem, Sharon, that so well conveys how we can feel lost and lonely in the midst of a busy, people-filled life. Well written!

Denise
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13 posted 04-12-2000 11:05 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

poet D this is exceptional... very well written and expresed..I love when you write serious like this...
and lord knows i relate to this piece...
i feel like you were peeking in my kitchen window...next time come on in and we'll have girl talk and coffee...or a stiff drink..maybe both (smile)
take care,jm

 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon


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14 posted 04-12-2000 12:11 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Poet deVine,
You dug deep for this one, very good. *L*
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15 posted 04-12-2000 06:55 PM       View Profile for kitkat   Email kitkat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kitkat

I can truly relate to this poem. It was if you knew me many years ago. Hugs to you from someone who has been there.
netswan
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16 posted 04-12-2000 06:58 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Alone -- this poem is thought provoking
and reminds me that there is no greater
lonliness than sitting in a room of people
and feeling alone.

Nicely written.

Teresa King
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17 posted 04-12-2000 07:03 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Glad it's not you, deVine one  
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18 posted 04-12-2000 08:30 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Flipping heck Sharon...that was like revisiting my past - the trophy .    I really feel for anyone in that position...I'd rather wash dirty socks..  

Big HUSG

†If I could, I would and if I didn't, I should have!


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19 posted 04-12-2000 08:38 PM       View Profile for WhiteNite   Email WhiteNite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhiteNite's Home Page   View IP for WhiteNite

For some reason I like this one... can't figure it out.... oh yeah.. IT'S GOOD. =)

†"The storm rises up when the shadows descend
every beat of my heart every day without end
I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break
till theres no more to give if thats what it takes
I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed
I will lay down my life if thats what you need
every second I live thats the promise I make"

I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know.  =)




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20 posted 04-12-2000 08:44 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

I just want to say that you are never alone in the feeling of being alone

Jeffrey
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21 posted 04-12-2000 09:39 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

I wish I did not know all too well how this feels. No matter how many there are around you, you are still horribly alone, detached, empty... Excellent free verse PdV
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22 posted 04-13-2000 02:24 AM       View Profile for Ella   Email Ella   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ella

Your poem was very emotional it touched my heart. There is nothing that compares to the void you have in your soul when you are feeling alone.
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23 posted 04-13-2000 07:10 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Tears here, PdV...that's about all I can say.
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24 posted 04-13-2000 08:05 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Oh this is excellent Sharon, yet so very sad.

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


 
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