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Elliott
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0 posted 04-12-2000 12:00 AM       View Profile for Elliott   Email Elliott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elliott

Oh, that I could blaspheme the mighty
In your presence, that it would make you feel better;
Id stand on this mountaintop and
With bent brow curse the weather,
Forgetting that my life swayed as a tether
In the wind.

I would that I could buy time in a suitcase,
And bring it with me when I come to see you,
Id give it in (earnest) verisimilitude,
And you might would come true,
And lie down with me  
For an eternity.

That I could one morning find your hair
In my drain, itd be my gain
And I wouldnt clean the &*^%@#$ sink,
As its uncleanliness made me think
Of you.

Please do not think me insane,
And if you do, if you decide to be vain and a prude,
Think of me as an insane man who sat down
And wrote this poem for you.

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copyright Apr. 2000 by DEM



[This message has been edited by Elliott (edited 04-12-2000).]
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Elliott
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1 posted 04-12-2000 01:03 AM       View Profile for Elliott   Email Elliott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elliott

nothin'? not a word?
Janet Marie
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I would that I could buy time in a suitcase,
And bring it with me when I come to see you,
Id give it in (earnest) verisimilitude,
And you might would come true,
And lie down with me  
For an eternity.

That I could one morning find your hair
In my drain, itd be my gain
And I wouldnt clean the &*^%@#$ sink,
As its uncleanliness made me think
Of you.
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very well written words and emotions
really smooth rhyme flow and unique word choices
very cool metaphors...
you have a creative and unique stlye

hows that??
take care
jm



 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon


Elliott
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3 posted 04-12-2000 01:14 AM       View Profile for Elliott   Email Elliott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elliott

LOL, Janet. you're a sweetie....forgive me, as i can at times demand attention.  
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4 posted 04-12-2000 01:17 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Elliott~ and demand attention you should. This is very creative and should be noticed!   -SEA
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5 posted 04-12-2000 02:54 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Elliot, Elliot, Elliot. We poets sometimes have need of sleep! Now that we are awake, we read with anticipation your wonderful poem....(I would suggest cleaning the drain though)..that's carrying love too far! LOL

I enjoyed this very much.  
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6 posted 04-12-2000 02:58 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Elliot~
Delightfully amusing.
~*Marge*~


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Martie
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Interesting, well done poem, Elliot.
Elliott
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8 posted 04-12-2000 06:22 PM       View Profile for Elliott   Email Elliott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elliott

thanks.



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