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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Finesse The lion was the king of all The world of wild animal One day he made a clever plan To get a kitten in his hand Proposing friendship to the cat Among his tales of this and that He said let’s you and I be friends We’ll both shake hands and make amends Come over near my lion’s lair We’ll do some tricks of double dare Performing fetes of every kind You show me yours, I’ll show you mine The cat was taken back, indeed But then reluctantly agreed He thought the lion rather slick To want to learn his every trick The feathered birds and wild beast Were also summoned to the feast So hard it was to comprehend That cat, a lion would befriend They gathered curiously to view But kept their distance from the two The lion said, let me begin And started showing off to him He bound with power from his hips And did impressive double flips He ran and jumped and spun around Then rolled and rolled across the ground Now, my friend, it’s time for you To show me every trick you do The little cat performed with flair Some double flip-flops in the air Spiral twists and leaps and bounds Somersaults upon the ground Now tell me friend, are you aware Of any more that you can share The cat said, no, that’s all I do I’ve shown all of my tricks to you With that fact openly announced The lion on the kitten pounced And what a tender cut of meat He’s always had desire to eat So thrilled he was in his delight And anxious now to take a bite But somehow he had lost his grip When cat did a triple backward flip Without a single moment’s pause Avoiding lion’s teeth and claws He left the lion in a daze Empty handed and amazed The lion said I didn’t know That clever trick you failed to show The cat then said I always leave A couple aces up my sleeve If I would show you all I do I now would be inside of you Leave a little of yourself Guarded safe upon the shelf There’s so much there inside of you Just keep a little hid from view Don’t expose yourself too much Or you could be a lion’s lunch Elizabeth santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 04-12-2000).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
<<<< Standing Ovulation >>>> Err...."ovation".  This was a splendid little ditty, and what a fabulous moral it has! Superb as always, you are! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow!!! Liz, this is wonderful...and what great meaningful truth...I'll have to remember...This needs to be published!! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, Elizabeth! Wonderfully done! Denise |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW, this is Excellent, and loved the message at the end, Well Done Elizabeth!  What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth - Elizabeth~ Pouncing with a punch. I loved it. The kitten in you outsmarted the wise ole' lion. Just who made him King anyway? Very, very clever ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Excellent writing as usual. You are a wonderful and talanted poetess. Love Sy |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh such wise advice displayed in such a well crafted way |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
<~~~~~bowing with my arms outstretched a piece wonderfully crafted and with a great moral tale? YOU ARE A GOD!!!! Jeffrey |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
***bowing too*** were not worthy were not worthy (smile) the title of this poem said it all. yes YOU ARE the definition of poetic finesse this was extraordinary and wisdom filled you are so gifted, i have such poet envy  take care sweet lady jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Poet Femme. Thanks for the ovulation. hehe Glad you enjoyed Martie, Thank you, dear. A good lesson from a little kitty cat. Denise, Thought you would like this. Thanks Dark Angel. Thanks for such a nice comment Martie, Yeh, quite a punch, huh? Thanks dear Sy, Meow! That means thank you, from a little pussy cat. hoot, Thanks, dear poetess Jeffery, Trying not to laugh, a big thank you from a humble cat Janet Marie, Just a little bit of finesse Can get you out of a great big mess! hehe Liz |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Cool... I love fables! I love the lesson in this one too, how so very true. I think sharing everything and being an open book may be a down fall of my onw.. maybe I should change that. =) Thanks for the idea. "The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) |
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ElektraXOXO Junior Member
since 2000-04-07
Posts 30San Antonio Tx |
what great advice beautifully put.......I loved it! |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
Excellent advice, cleverly displayed, for the young heart, how to love-play. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Superb in tale and talent, Liz. ~ Claire |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
That little critter must be me sister. Thanks again for all the glitter. I hope I remember just what I should give 'er. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Liz, This is so cute and the wisdom at the end is so very true. Cerenity |
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