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Martie
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Unfurled and Danced

Spring has found me
with its bright sky,
found me unfurled and danced
by the glorious opening of color
that perfumes the day with peach,
plum and apple blossoms
and nights of dusky jasmineís
heady dreaming.

Of course
I was lost,
my head in the poem
of this small corner
of my world reaching past season
into the core
that burns no matter,
just burns thoughts
made into words,
ropes of words that I climb
or fall from and dangle
drenched and unsure of direction.

And so I write for seasons
where creation finally breathes
and push it from my pores
and bruise my skin
in trying to say what I mean
and the moon still calls me
and I know I havenít said it right
not to the full round brightness
of its meaning
and the stars unfold me
and I find that it doesnít matter
only breathing matters
great and deep and powerful
til I am cemented to the sky
with air so heavy that I am drowning.

And what is color to this corner
that begs so much from me,
what of the wide open door
and the precious fern dappled porch
and the constant need of attention
to water the vibrant greening day?

I lay down under a sharp sun
this pressed rhythm
light and cloudless and full
and the explosion is so quiet
that the humming comes closer
and whispers
and I canít quite hear it.

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
David2
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1 posted 04-11-2000 04:17 PM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

Martie,
    Thjis is full of wonderful imagery! I will have to reread it to understand it better and take it in more fully, but it was very enjoyable. I was hooked from the very beginning.
              David2
Marilyn
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2 posted 04-11-2000 04:21 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

This is wonderfully done Martie. Very thought provoking indeed.  
Pepper
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Martie, I've run out of adjectives to describe your poetry ... Amazing and exquisite are but a few that come to mind ......
I devoured(sp) this piece ....
Dark Angel
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4 posted 04-11-2000 05:36 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Martie this is beautiful, the imagery is great!!!
I could actually smell the scent of ....
peach,
plum and apple blossoms
and nights of dusky jasmineís
          heady dreaming.
Beautiful!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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David--I'm so glad my poem hooked you and thank you for taking the time to read it again.

Marilyn--Provoking thought is a good thing and quite a compliment.

Pepper--you spelled devoured right..and thank you for such sweet words.

Dark Angel--Glad I brought you some olfactory delight.
Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 04-11-2000 08:31 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

How could any one feel spring more than this.
What a lovely poem, Martie.
I can smell the fragrances now
Liz
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7 posted 04-11-2000 08:48 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~

'thoughts
made into words,
ropes of words that I climb
or fall from'

It does NOT get any better than this !
Period.

~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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8 posted 04-11-2000 08:53 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Martie, I log on every day with expectations of another of your glorious poems.  You have never failed. I have this sudden desire to want to go and lay down out in the back yard and watch the setting sun.  Last night, six deer were grazing in the neighbor's lawn, nibbling at the bushes. Tonight, I have this feeling they just might return.

[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 04-11-2000).]
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9 posted 04-11-2000 10:00 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Beautiful and filled with such rich, vivid imagery, Martie.  Lovely work, as always.  

 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~
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Liz--Thanks for being such a constant friend.

Marge--Thank you for such a wonderful comment

Mike--I'm blessed to have a friend like you!

Krista--I'm so pleased that you like it.
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11 posted 04-11-2000 11:45 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Martie~ ths pictures you paint with your words are so moving....this is beautiful. -SEA
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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Your last verse is astounding.  "Lying under a sharp sun" is a way of describing it that I would never have thought of.
~ ~ ~
You are filled with such beautiful poetry, it amazes me on a non-stop basis, increasingly.
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13 posted 04-12-2000 12:33 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

"I haven't said it right"? Was THAT one of your lines? Martie, there is NOTHING you haven't said right, including this wonderful poem!
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Oh...I most certainly wish spring would find me  
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You always say it just right, Martie! This is beautiful!

Denise
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will have to ditto Bal on this one...you said it perfect....you allowed us to feel right along with you....this is perfect...I love it!

wow.....just reread....had to add a WOW, this is really great!

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Martie
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Sea--thank you for such a sweet comment.

Rosemary--Here in California, the sun is sharp..thank you for liking my poetry.

Balladeer--You are a dear and always make me feel so talented.

Ruth--Spring is in your heart.

Denise--What a nice thing to say

Corazon--thank you so much for the re-read and the wow.
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"til I am cemented to the sky
               with air so heavy that I am drowning."
love this - these lines especially
Janet Marie
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hi sweets...dont mind me....just updating my library file...adding some old favs.  

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~

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