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tulip
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0 posted 2000-04-11 01:57 PM


I have a gift, to see right through,
I know at once if you are true,
I know that you just want me too,
But I want you to love me.

I've fallen into your spider web,
I'm trapped and now I feel I'm dead,
I wish to climb inside your head,
I want you to love me.

I haven't had these feelings long,
I have to be the one who's strong,
I know my feelings can't be wrong,
I want you to love me.

Why is it I'm always in second place?
Why can't I ever win the race?
Am I just doomed to have this place,
I want you to love me.

I let you go, it hurts me deep,
I didn't know, there's no relief,
I lost another good nights sleep,
I want you to love me.



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Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
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1 posted 2000-04-11 03:13 PM


Nice poem.  I like the way you used rhyme in this piece.  Flowed well.


 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.


David2
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since 2000-03-22
Posts 407

2 posted 2000-04-11 04:19 PM


Some very heartfelt emotions expressed well. Nice work.
         David2

tulip
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3 posted 2000-04-11 10:03 PM


Thank you...
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