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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2000-04-11 12:40 PM


Away I Run


Away I run
   Deft feet of iron-shod.
My heart,
   Encased,
      In cloudy pain.
Ever ‘cross the road
   Of empty,
      I trod:
Live mem'ries
   Of lonesome's remains.

Away I run
   O'er paths
      Laden,
         With you;
Echoes,
   Of a smile
      Once bestowed
Upon these eyes
   You gazed in-
      Crystal blue.
Brimming tears
   O'er
      Our final trial,

Away I run
   From
      Justification,
         The lies you tell,
            To tell the truth.

© Copyright 2000 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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1 posted 2000-04-11 01:09 AM


Indeed, a hard path you traverse, my friend.  I hope new light shines on your destination...  and for God's sake take off those iron feet, I have some good tennies if you want them!!!


Michael

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-04-11 01:11 AM


Sometimes running down that road, it seems like it will never end..but it will. I promise. Amazing poem!  
Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-04-11 01:14 AM


another perfect poem...and i have noticed your always have perfect and unique presentation as well.
strong emotions in this rather cryptic piece.
very nice
take care, jm

 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon



mariee66
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since 2000-01-30
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Recess, OfYourMind
4 posted 2000-04-11 01:21 AM


How sad and lonely.
I hope once your running ends, you will have arms to fall into...love anew.

~Marie~

Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15
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Sitting in Michael's Lap
5 posted 2000-04-11 04:25 AM


Argh ...

Once again I have fumbled, and once again you have called me on it ... and you know how I hate apologizing ...

Chris, this poem is heartbreaking -- much more so because I know that you mean every word of it.  There is nothing more wonderful or more dangerous than being in love -- it is, in truth, the original "agony and ecstacy" -- and while I know that there is little that anything I can do or say will change about how you are hurting, I hope that you know I am here for you (as are many others).

It is always darkest before the dawn, my friend ... your "perfect woman" is out there, somewhere, and I pray that you find her soon.

Hugs ...

--Me




[This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 04-12-2000).]

Severn
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6 posted 2000-04-11 07:05 AM


Whatever the motivation - this is...a poem that dances.

K


 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

Elizabeth Santos
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Pennsylvania
7 posted 2000-04-11 07:30 AM


An unexpected little blow there at the end.
Beautifully written and presented
Liz

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8 posted 2000-04-11 07:32 AM


Christopher~
You write such beautiful thoughts
of love and love lost,
of hearts on fire and tears spilled
to put the fire out,
of gain and of pain.

Wonderfully talented you are, my friend.
Hugs to you.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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9 posted 2000-04-11 10:00 AM


"The lies you tell,
            To tell the truth."

Excellent!!!


poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
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Arkansas
10 posted 2000-04-11 10:42 AM


May a bird fly over you, and drop a *happy poop* on you!   You sure need it!    
Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

11 posted 2000-04-11 07:01 PM


I liked your "Ever 'cross the road of empty," Chris. Liked the whole thing, truth be told, but that line...you've got a marvelous penchant for independent thinking that translates with ease into your writing. This one is VERY nice!

~ Claire

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
12 posted 2000-04-12 07:57 AM


Chris here's another path for ya bud. This one looks brighter    Michael's right, take off those iron shoes dude! And walk the plushness of this one  



Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
13 posted 2000-04-12 03:34 PM


The agony, bitterness and loss dripped from this peace my friend. Very well written as always.

Somewhere burried beneath that armour of yours beats a soft heart.  

Beki
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA
14 posted 2000-04-12 03:43 PM


This poem dances in spite of those iron shoes! I love your spirit, love the conclusion, and I always love your presentation! Good work, Christopher!
Beki
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15 posted 2000-04-12 03:43 PM


This poem dances in spite of those iron shoes! I love your spirit, love the conclusion, and I always love your presentation! Good work, Christopher!
Corinne
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state of confusion
16 posted 2000-04-12 04:13 PM


the last two lines are fabulous (and so is the rest of the poem)

Corinne

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835
Florida
17 posted 2000-04-12 04:58 PM


Hugs, m'friend..


 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown

Cassanova
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since 2000-04-12
Posts 39
Turlock, Ca.
18 posted 2000-04-12 08:11 PM


Hi Chris!

Hi Chris

I finally made it in here... you know me, takes forever to get to something!

I'm still jealous! I wish I could write half as good as you! But I see you have some heavy competition here! The poetry here is amazing! Thank you for telling me about this place!!!

Jason

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19 posted 2000-04-12 10:14 PM


Amazing Christopher!  And o I do relate...
Denise
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20 posted 2000-04-13 01:53 PM


Excellent poem, Christopher!

Denise

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