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Tara Simms
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0 posted 2000-04-10 10:35 PM


I wrote this one in high school (about an eon ago).


Where were you?

Where were you when I needed you
Or when I was scared?
You weren’t here when I called for you
Although you said you cared.

Where were you when I laid in bed
Crying myself to sleep?
How do I heal my shattered heart
When wounds are cut this deep?

Where were you when I craved your touch,
Ached to see your face?
I drifted off in dreamless sleep,
Pillow in my embrace.

Where were you during those times
When I needed you near?
I don’t know where you were
But you sure as hell weren’t here.



© Copyright 2000 Tara Simms - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 2000-04-10 11:15 PM


Ah, this is so sad. Well written!

Denise

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2 posted 2000-04-10 11:32 PM


Very well written
I could feel your pain
All too familiar

Jeffrey

WhiteNite
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3 posted 2000-04-11 12:33 PM


I really like this one.. espeically that ending.  Very nice.

 "The storm rises up when the shadows descend
every beat of my heart every day without end
I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break
till theres no more to give if thats what it takes
I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed
I will lay down my life if thats what you need
every second I live thats the promise I make"

I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =)

hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 2000-04-11 11:12 AM


Whew Girl...you tell it like it is !!!  
Tara Simms
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5 posted 2000-04-11 10:19 PM


Ruth, yeah, I've never been one to beat around the bush.  One of my better qualities, I think.

Jeffrey, thank you.  It hurts when people don't keep the promises they made.

Denise and Whitenite, thanks for reading!


 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



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6 posted 2000-04-12 12:16 PM


Excellent Tara. . . I know that I felt that way when I was in high school. . .

Wonderful poem my friend. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Tara Simms
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7 posted 2000-04-12 07:20 PM


Thanks Sven!
Balladeer
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8 posted 2000-04-12 07:34 PM


He was probably putting Noxema on his zits, Tara. Don't take it personally  
hsystems
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9 posted 2000-04-12 07:35 PM


Tara - very well expressed, and I can relate!  I was not very popular in high school.  My father can remember me trying to get a date for a school dance, once.  I had to call 14 girls before one said "yes."  I wore my heart on my sleeve, so I could really relate to this poem.  Thanks for the trip down memory lane, and I hope things are better now!


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 Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry
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Torrie
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10 posted 2000-04-12 10:50 PM


I can totally relate.  Good job expressing it.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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11 posted 2000-04-12 11:18 PM



I see memories of parent's, lovers, friends....anyone loved who never came...much sorrow in this one.  Well done and said with style.  


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.


Tara Simms
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12 posted 2000-04-13 07:15 PM


ROFL@Balladeer.  Gee, thanks!  And here I thought I had touched him with my words.  You had to burst my bubble, didn't you?

hsystems, sounds like this was a painful trip down memory lane for you.  Sometimes it's only when we look at where we started that we truly see how far we've come.

butterflies_don't_cry, thank you.  This was (as you guys probably guessed) originally written for my first love, but as I recalled the poem and typed it up, it occurred to me that it also applies to my mother (who died when I was very young).

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