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Blondie
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0 posted 2000-04-10 05:09 PM


Have you ever wondered why this day people feel alone?
Is it because of our society's underlying tone?
They say, "don't kill or take a poor soul's life"
but then they fill our pockets with a gun and razor knife.
They say size doesn't matter, we all are equal and free,
but why everytime when I open "People" there is a model who wears size 3
They say that caring for your kids is what we do
but then we see children with bruised eyes and a heart in two!
They say teen's are fine, and by life's rules they abide
but we see some filled with so much pain that they commit suicide
We say they'll stop smoking if we up the age to 18 to sell a smoke
but yet every minute a 10 year old will take a puff and choke
We decided if schools passed out condoms, babies wouldn't come
but yet pregnancy in teens is on a high for some
*It's time to stop believing in all the things they say
And view the world with open eyes as it exists today.
The changes must come from within from folks like me and you
And then perhaps the things they say may possibly come true.

*Balladeer's ending



[This message has been edited by Blondie (edited 04-11-2000).]

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hsystems
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1 posted 2000-04-10 05:25 PM


Blondie - very nice poem!  Maybe you could sum it up by saying something to the effect that the world is filled with hypocrisy, but we can change it - one person at a time - with our own actions.


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Cutie Putootie
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2 posted 2000-04-10 07:09 PM


I don't have an idea for an ending but Melissa this is a great poem, I hope some of the Passion friends can help though.

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3 posted 2000-04-10 07:18 PM


I don't think there is an ending for this poem, cause every one of the things mentioned are very much still going on. I think this poem is a perfect display of our society, just the way it is....(my opinion)

Jeffrey

Blondie
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4 posted 2000-04-10 07:22 PM


THANKS FOR THE REPLIES SO FAR...I don't know how to end it though still  
Balladeer
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5 posted 2000-04-10 07:39 PM


It's time to stop believing in all the things they say
And view the world with open eyes as it exists today.
The changes must come from within from folks like me and you
And then perhaps the things they say may possibly come true.

Blondie
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6 posted 2000-04-10 07:46 PM


Oh wow balladeer I must say I love this ending, let's see what others got and then I guess I can take my pick  
weaubleau
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7 posted 2000-04-10 08:10 PM


wonderful poem...

balladeer's ending is so fitting!

sounds incredible together!


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8 posted 2000-04-10 08:46 PM


Blondie~
Your poem with Balladeer's ending ...
says it perfectly.
At least that's what I think.
~*Marge*~


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Denise
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9 posted 2000-04-10 11:01 PM


Great poem, Blondie! I also like Balladeer's ending!

Denise

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10 posted 2000-04-11 12:17 PM


I changed my mind Balladeer wrote the perfect ending to this

Jeffrey

Blondie
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11 posted 2000-04-11 06:41 AM


Ok...then Balladeer's ending is it  
thanks good ole' balladeer

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