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Deja Vu?

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hsystems
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0 posted 04-10-2000 02:34 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Author's Note:  This poem is a little unusual for me, in that it starts out as free verse and ends as rhyme.  But, that was how it came to me.  When I wrote it, the anguish I was feeling over the possibility of a failed relationship expressed itself in free verse.  And the beautiful emotions that the relationship gave me came out as rhyme.

          Deja Vu

Have I done it again?
Did I let my heart get ahead of me?
When I sang the sweet melody of my emotions,
Did you hear it, instead, as a warning call?
Have I frightened you, My Love?
Was I wrong to tell you how I feel?
Or, would it, perhaps, have been better for me to close myself off
from these lovely sensations,
As I once promised myself that I would?
Have I gone too quickly?
Did I run too far?
In my haste to reach you, did I pass you by without realizing
That perhaps you were planning to travel in a different direction?

Have I made a grave mistake?
Did I drive you away?
By expressing my desire to be with you,
Did I, somehow, open a deep chasm between us?
Oh, God!  I hope not...

For the feelings I have shared with you
Are beautiful and rare.
They fill my heart with tenderness,
And joy, beyond compare -
A special kind of magic
That I know was born, above,
United us in spirit,
And enfolded us in love.
So, tell me, was I dreaming,
When I swore that you and I
Could rise above life's obstacles,
And dance across the sky?
Or, do you feel, as I do, Dear,
That this was meant to be;
And that our hearts may beat as one,
In priceless unity?

          -Troy J. Hoecherl-

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hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 04-10-2000 03:53 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Oh Troy....this is so sincere there is no need to appologize for anything in it....I only hope you've expressed some of these emotions in part anyway with her.
Destiny
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2 posted 04-10-2000 04:26 PM       View Profile for Destiny   Email Destiny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Destiny

"So, tell me, was I dreaming,
When I swore that you and I
Could rise above life's obstacles,
And dance across the sky? "

oh Troy... this is heart-wrenching... beautiful..

Destiny  
Torrie
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3 posted 04-10-2000 05:03 PM       View Profile for Torrie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Torrie

You have so beautifully expressed your love for this person and the way everyone feels when scared about the future of a relationship.  I am one to always just say the way I feel, and then I end up feeling like this poem expressed.  I totally relate with how you feel!
hsystems
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4 posted 04-10-2000 05:06 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Hoot - I did share the poem with her after I wrote it.  The relationship didn't work out - but that's okay, cuz I never would have met my wonderful wife if things had worked out with the other woman.  

Destiny - thank you for your warm words!  This one came pretty easily, because it was so heart-felt.

Thank you both for reading!


Troy

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hsystems
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5 posted 04-10-2000 05:10 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Torrie - you snuck past me while I was responding to the earlier comments.  Thanks so much for your kind words - it's always nice to know that others have felt the same as we do.


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passing shadows
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6 posted 04-10-2000 06:12 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

hit me just right..."In my haste to reach you, did I pass you by without realizing"

*nodding head* very nice
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