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Corazon
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0 posted 04-10-2000 10:25 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon

the window whistles the air
too loudly
and the radio is playing
a song I can not believe
someone paid money
to record
and the brakes on the car
next to me
are fingernails on blackboard
and the comments
said in jest by a friend
now hover hauntingly
too close to the truth
and is that me that is
thinking so loudly
trying to hear my own insanity
above the constant
peck peck pecking
of your
if if if
you you you
don't don't don't...
then you you you
should should should
leave.
and you peck
incessantly waiting for my yes,
when what you really want me to say
is no
I do
love you.
but I don't.
and your pecking is just a distraction
to cover the hole you are digging
to suck out the part of me
that changed
that no longer
cares
but cannot voice
her reason for staying...
but wait
I have to silence this window
this song
this air
this noise
these ears
these ears can take
no more
and for a second
the resounding nothing
brings relief
and yes that would suffice
it weren't for
the peck
peck
peck



[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-10-2000).]
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RainbowGirl
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1 posted 04-10-2000 05:49 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Big HUSG sweetheart, sometimes the pecking can be worse than the silence of the cogs going round and round, well in my case, cause the cogs have nothing to go round..ooops....sorry, just trying to bring a smile cause you need one..

HUSG
NamelessOne
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2 posted 04-10-2000 05:54 PM       View Profile for NamelessOne   Email NamelessOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for NamelessOne

Powerful stuff ,thank you i enjoyed it
passing shadows
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3 posted 04-10-2000 05:54 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

I like silence too...most of the time...nice flowing read Corazon
Martie
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4 posted 04-10-2000 06:21 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Powerful writing Corazon!
Corazon
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5 posted 04-10-2000 06:21 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

RG sure is good to see you and yep you made me smile, and nope your cogs got more than most to go 'round....thank you for the hugs, and yep, I did

Namelessone, thank you

PS...yep, sometimes all the noises in the world combined with what's in your head can be too much...and lol maybe you can't stop *thinking* but you can reach out and turn off the radio *g*

oops martie, you snuck in, thank you very much  

[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-10-2000).]
JamesMichael
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6 posted 04-11-2000 03:44 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I liked this and the song would have to be Madonna singing American Pie....James
Pepper
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7 posted 04-11-2000 03:54 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

More Hugs coming your way, Corazon ...
This is a powerful piece ... it's also a piece that I can relate to ...
Better days ahead, is my wish for you .........
PoeticKnight
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8 posted 04-11-2000 04:06 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

Wow, you must know the cacophony of voices in my head. This is so cool. You spoke volumes for those voices...*S*
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9 posted 04-11-2000 04:44 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

When a poem drags me into the cacophony and I find myself wanting to scream "SHUT UP!"... I think I'd have to give that poem a WOW!... and the poet my heartfelt sympathy!
devina
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10 posted 04-12-2000 01:07 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Well I'm not gonna be the one to "peck" atcha about remembering your heart hun...you've always told me that!! Just know I"m available for hugs at any point that you need em sweetie!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Corazon
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11 posted 04-12-2000 10:39 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

thanks all....your responses along with my writing never fail to help me heal...to get me to tomorrow...with a smile....thank you much...
suthern....its ok if you don't read it more than once....its enough that I had to live it
devina....hugs back, and nope...*you* are the sweetie!
pmc
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12 posted 04-12-2000 11:01 AM       View Profile for pmc   Email pmc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pmc

Hello Corazon
I felt your poem and I felt for you,
I hope you can get the relief that you need.
Take care.
Patrick
Denise
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13 posted 04-12-2000 01:38 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I've been there in the past too, Corazon and I'd never want to be there again. Your poem described it perfectly. Sending you some great big HUGS your way!

Denise
Danny Holloway
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14 posted 04-12-2000 03:07 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

There are times when silence IS truly golden!
Nice writing!
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