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Was I?

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Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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0 posted 04-10-2000 03:57 AM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

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Nearly half a century ago
I was born with the right parts.
I was the girl my mother wanted.
~ ~ ~
Yet never good enough,
Never smart enough,
Never tidy enough,
Never a hard enough worker,
Never dutiful enough taking care of her.
~ ~ ~
Too noisy,
Too emotional,
Too quick to give up;
Too many needs of my own,
Too exploratory, too rambunctious.
~ ~ ~
Yes I was born with the right parts.
I was the girl my mother wanted.



[This message has been edited by Rosemary J. Gwaltney (edited 04-10-2000).]
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Michael
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1 posted 04-10-2000 04:05 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

I can relate to this one only too well.
I never was anything "good" to my mother but I'm sure I could tab a long list of what I wasn't that I should have been.

My empathies...


Michael
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2 posted 04-10-2000 04:23 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Rosemary, what a heartfelt piece of writing...pure unfeigned emotion emanating from just a few matter ~ of ~ fact words. You've so aptly expressed frustration and feelings of futility here, and I can relate to both. Thank you.

~ Claire
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3 posted 04-10-2000 04:32 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

“Persian Pussy,”

Well, this seems to be as close to that Persian fur ball I’ve been for a while. They say nothing is more determined than a Persian on one of her hot curiosity pursuits. You leap up in the semi-opened window of my heart where you force out a squeaky, barely audible mew. Then you sit there walleyed in the rain, watching eagerly, making sure you’ve got my attention tearing me from my private little sea of thought, not to mention the shrouded ones I should'nt ought thinking. But then, as I must take notice, you've put on one of them innocent poses and naturally I must get up and let your teary rain soaked tush in the sliding transparent glass window of my life. Of course, you don’t just bounce right in but must make a couple exotic glamour turns, maybe get your motor purring as you sashay around the perimeter of my room. Wherever there’s an open window, there’s your little squeaky meow. It strikes me funny. I wonder what you’re really doing because you know my door is always open. I like the fresh air. Howbeit you still want me to get up and come over and give you a personal invite. Ha! WHAT’S UP BABY BUB-BA? I hope you know, you’re not fooling me with any of that sexy innocent sashay aura of grace about you which ironically emerges as a sweet snowy blond feline longing for any and all of my hugs & kisses. By the way, did you know it works?

 
Martie
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4 posted 04-10-2000 06:29 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Rosemary--very powerful and heartfelt poem...funny how that little girl still insists on traveling around with us after we are grown.  Hugs!  Lucky, quit playing with your err cat?
wayoutwalt
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5 posted 04-10-2000 06:31 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

i like this its deep o course ...lot said in the last stanza

 All Day I Dream About Stanzas!!
Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 04-10-2000 06:47 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

This poem did say alot. And Martie's right. People continue to carry that baggage for the rest of their lives. It is sad to be demeaning to a child.
Very well presented, Rosemary
Liz
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