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bsquirrel
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0 posted 04-10-2000 01:54 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

Tubing and arms and cracked headlight eyes.
Mirrors and circuitry under scorched dust.
There isn't much order left to their bodies.
Just piles of metal shining in the dark.

Shadowwires grow from the flashlight's glare --
In the beam I catch a flatplated eye.
A circle shining like a coin on the floor;
Near my footprints making a path twice defined.

Pieces lying everywhere without description or function.
Can dead electrons find a stream to orbit within?
Does energy still pulse within remaining wires?
Can long-hardened oil lubricate movement again?

Fallen for some unknown cause,
Built by some unknown maker,
Seen over to fulfill their task
And then left destroyed.

If they can never live again
Are there digital flowers I can pick and place
In due respect of their motionless state?
I'd like to find a pixellated rose or binary tree.

I can only imagine and hope (for me)
They were destroyed in an event of importance, significance.
It would be a shame to think of this warehouse crypt
Not as a memorial, just a rusting test case.

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Lost Dreamer
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1 posted 04-10-2000 02:07 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

I thought maybe I had fallen asleep and dreamed that I just read a poem about a burial ground for robots. What a poem I was actually feeling bad for the scraps of metal left to die alone amongst themselves. Then I get to the end with the "I'd like to find a pixellated rose or binary tree." and thought wow the thought that went into this poem, I really like it, great job.  
serenity blaze
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2 posted 04-10-2000 02:11 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Positively RABID for meat tonight...

Your imagery is Par Excellence, tonight! er--
this morning?  

"A circle shining like a coin on the floor.
near my footprints making a path twice defined..."

Once again, a concert for one in my livingroom!

so much here--too much to pick at.  LOVED IT.
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3 posted 04-10-2000 02:40 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Lost Dreamer,
Thank you. You made me smile really wide tonight. It's a great compliment to hear that you thought you might have been dreaming -- the sort of separate, unearthly yet grounded logic that is dreaming. I just had the image stuck in my head, and wanted to write without really explaining why or how or what. I appreciate your response.

serenity,
You made me smile, too -- just that first line alone got me laughing. Which must it must be bedtime. Thanks for reading. Oh, and by the way, over there, it's morning. Over here, it's still night; barely.

Mike
JamesMichael
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4 posted 04-10-2000 03:06 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I enjoyed reading this..it sounds so interesting I want to visit this place.  What City and what State?  James
Meadowmuse
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Mike, this is absolutely filled with image after robotic image ~ so well assembled!

I like it very much.  

~ Claire
Janet Marie
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6 posted 04-10-2000 09:30 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Shadowwires grow from the flashlight's glare --
In the beam I catch a flatplated eye.
A circle shining like a coin on the floor;
Near my footprints making a path twice defined.

----------------
I can only imagine and hope (for me)
They were destroyed in an event of importance, significance.
It would be a shame to think of this warehouse crypt
Not as a memorial, just a rusting test case.
---------------

OH that mind of yours!!
superb imagery
very cool, you are.
jm
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7 posted 04-11-2000 02:21 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

James,
Well, I'm in Northridge, CA, if you want to visit the place where my imagination lurks (and strikes).  

Thanks, Claire.  

JM,
Much thanks to you, also. And I have to go three for three. Thus:  

Mike
hoot_owl_rn
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Ah Mike....a vivid display of modern (as modern can be in electronics, modern this second, scrap metal the next ) machine in poetry   Nicely written  
 
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