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Skyfyre
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0 posted 04-09-2000 10:07 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

Deeply

How deeply lost within in your eyes
Once dwelt my raptured soul,
When Love would know no compromise
Nor rest if less than whole;

How deeply my devotion grew
When rested on my shrine
The graceful vision that was you:
No goddess more divine.

So deeply felt was evry kiss
So sacred each caress --
Such rare perfection shone in this --
No verse could eer confess

How deeply flowed the river swift
That raged with love unbound,
And washed in purity the gift
Of joy in you Id found.

So sure and deeply ran my trust
In you, in what we shared,
That when your blow was dealt in lust
I met it unprepared;

So deeply cut the wound you made:
It tore my world apart
To know the hand which held the blade
Had guarded once my heart.

So fitting that you were the one
To drag my spirit down:
For where the waters deeply run,
Tis easier to drown.





 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 04-09-2000 10:18 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Skyfyre,
Exquisitely sad.
Meadowmuse
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2 posted 04-09-2000 10:32 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

"To know the hand which held the blade
Had guarded once my heart."

Kess, yes exquisite...in both voice, craft and emotion. Such a poignant and searing expression of betrayal and irony.

(I was so pleased to see your byline tonight.)

~ Claire


Master
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3 posted 04-09-2000 11:04 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Kess, you continue to amaze me! Do you have a fan club that I could join?
Sven
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4 posted 04-09-2000 11:16 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Kess, I can feel the pain in this one. . .my heart grieves for you tonight my friend. . .

Very heartfelt. . . I always love to see your work. . . but not like this. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

pen of passion
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5 posted 04-09-2000 11:20 PM       View Profile for pen of passion   Email pen of passion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pen of passion

Ouch!  Excellent poem.
Skyfyre
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6 posted 04-09-2000 11:37 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Thank you, my friends and colleagues, for your kind replies.  

Sy:    Thank you sir, 'twas as I intended.

Claire:  Your praise is both welcome and appreciated, for I have a great deal of respect for your talent.  Most of all, it is nice to know that I have been missed.  Thank you muchly, my friend.  

Master:  You are a one-man fan club!  You'd better start building me a bigger house if you plan to keep pumping up my ego like this!  

Sven:  First off, big HUGS!  I've missed you ...

Second, as much as I appreciate your sympathy, I'm afraid it is misplaced -- this piece was written for a friend, to whom I fear I have been nearly useless as far as soothing this heartache goes.  I only hope this brings with it a bit of the comfort I have been unable to provide ...

pen of passion:  ouch, indeed.  your compliment is well received.  

--Kess
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7 posted 04-09-2000 11:38 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Magnificent!!! Wonderful poem...perfect.
Jeffrey Carter
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8 posted 04-10-2000 12:29 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Such beautiful penmanship. This piece truly amazed me. Hope this helped your friend.
It surely helped me.

Jeffrey
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9 posted 04-10-2000 12:31 AM       View Profile for WhiteNite   Email WhiteNite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhiteNite's Home Page   View IP for WhiteNite

Speachless... er however you spell it... guess I'm in the wrong message board if I can't spell huh? =)

Seriously... I don't know what to say... awesome.... wish I coulc call that one my own. =)

 "We always said it would be good to go away, someday,
but if there's nothing there to make things change,
if it's the same to you I'll just hang."
--Matchbox20 (Hang)
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10 posted 04-10-2000 12:57 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Superb?  (Methinks with this one, you have come dangerously close to draining a bunch of poets of superlatives...BRAVO.)
Michael
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11 posted 04-10-2000 03:41 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Kess, this one just plain gouges the eyeballs.  'Tis true - the more we love something the more we can be hurt by it.  Believe me, I can feel every bit of the pain beneath this one.  My empathies to you tonight, my friend.


michael

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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The last verse hit me right between the eyes.  Practically knocked me off my feet.  Excellently worded.  I'll have to keep my eye out for your work.
dhuron
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great poem. Full of power.  Loved reading this.
Mike
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14 posted 04-10-2000 02:40 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Such a pleasure to experience your creations.
Denise
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15 posted 04-10-2000 09:41 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent writing, as always, Kess! Glad to see you posting again!

Denise
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16 posted 04-10-2000 09:54 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Kess...this is absolutely beautiful. Your writing as always is esquisite  

Loved the final two lines by the way  
Sven
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Kess,
     well good. . . and I hope that this provides some relief and comfort to your friend too. . .

And a big HUG back to you, my friend, I've missed you too!!

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Christopher
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18 posted 04-11-2000 12:16 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

'Allo m'friend.

I can see that your absence has not been without it's benefits. You've come back with a mighty punch, especially for one such as I who reads much of me in this.

"When Love would know no compromise"

Perhaps this says most of it here. Is not a portion of "love" about compromise? When expected to be more, "Whole," as you said, then perhaps it is doomed from the beginning, no?

Beautiful and haunting and right on the mark. Thank you my friend.
Skyfyre
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19 posted 04-11-2000 05:20 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

PdV:  You are too kind, but thank you nonetheless.  

J.C:  Always glad to lend a hand -- often it leads to future friendships.  Thank you for reading.

WhiteNite:  Fear not, you are not the only poet here with the spelling affliction -- LOL.  We all have our moments.  Your speechlessness is the highest form of flattery; thank you.  

serenity:  Methinks you have perfected the ideal way to stroke my already somewhat overblown ego!  Thanks much!  hehehe  

Michael:  How right you are.  Unfortunately, it is difficult to love something less simply to safeguard one's peace of mind, is it not?  Stubborn beast, that Love -- always thinking in extremes ...

Rosemary:  I am not normally a violent woman, but I will take a bow on that slug between the peepers, here.  Thank you for a most generous compliment!  

dhuron:  glad you enjoyed, thanks for reading.  

Mike:  Likewise, I'm sure.  

Denise:  Glad to be back.  Your enthusiasm is neverending -- people like you keep me coming back to this place!  

Sven:  

Chris:  Allo yourself!  (sigh)  

As far as my "absence" goes, I believe that it was you who said that stress and misery make for awesome poetry, was it not?  LOL

As for the rest, I must refer you to one of my favorite sonnets of all time:

Let us not to the marriage of true minds
Admit impediments.  Love is not love
Which alters when it alteration finds,
Or bends with the remover to remove ...


Indeed, my friend, any relationship is about compromise -- such is the nature of individuals, there are bound to be points on which even the most "perfect" couple will not see eye-to-eye.  But Love, in and of itself , is an all-or-nothing proposition: it is either whole, or it is not love.  Period.  There is nothing wrong with always expecting a rose to be a rose, regardless of how sweet it might smell (or not) right at the moment!  

Thank you all again ...

--Kess

Nan
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20 posted 04-12-2000 12:42 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Better late than never means you get another step up to the plate - I love this for more than one reason... First, that it isn't about you - That's a good thing - Secondly, it's wonderfully crafted... of course... and... it's not iambic pentameter... iambic, yes... pentameter, nope... you deviant, you...
JamesMichael
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21 posted 04-12-2000 04:18 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

How lovely and yet how sad love can be...
it can take you to the highest mountains..
and drag you thru the deepest valleys....
James
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