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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL 
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-- Chasing shadows -- (4-7-99) I thought I'd met you, You were someone I used to know, She was standing there before me, But closer to your shadow. She's been pushed away, And I wonder if I'm to blame, I'm sure I didn't do it, But the damage is the same. I found her scent behind you, And my comfort in your stare, But the trust that she gave me, Was never really there. I thought I knew love, But not quite where to go, There was a little of a lot, But closer to my shadow. I've been fooling myself, And I didn't even know, Only in her arms, Did I feel like letting go. In her I found your meaning, Of the love you held so long, I looked back to show you, But now I'm all alone. --Dave It's probably the only poem you'll see me post for a little bit so enjoy. =) I've had a problem getting inspired recently. Hoping this place will help. It looks like there are some great poets around here. "We always said it would be good to go away, someday, but if there's nothing there to make things change, if it's the same to you I'll just hang." --Matchbox20 (Hang) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family. This is a powerful poem! I look forward to reading more from you. Please check your email for a special welcome.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She's been pushed away, And I wonder if I'm to blame, **I'm sure I didn't do it, But the damage is the same**. I found her scent behind you, And my comfort in your stare, But the trust that she gave me, Was never really there. ------------- In her I found your meaning, Of the love you held so long, I looked back to show you, But now I'm all alone. -------------- hey...WAY COOL...that was fast!!! I'm glad you came on over to check us out. and I'll take any excuse to read this poem again...it so damn good!!! you know whos writing it reminds me of... the first time i read it...this came into my mind...it reminds me of a Rob song... I can hear mb20 singing this...very cool.  welcome to passions...lots to read and take in, enjoy the poetic pleasures. take care, jm ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dave~ This is pretty poetry. I hope you'll find the inspiration to keep you writing. Read lots and it will come !  Welcome to the heart of friendship here at Passion's. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Well now that IS a compliment. Thanks. I loooove Rob. Well... you know... as much as I can without being gay and all... I can pick up his voice and his music out of any piece. I can't really say I see his style in my poem there but if he wanted to give it a try I'd be honored. =) It'd deffinitely be better than my sad attempt at putting a chorus in there. =) Later "We always said it would be good to go away, someday, but if there's nothing there to make things change, if it's the same to you I'll just hang." --Matchbox20 (Hang) |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You have talent, Dave. Hang around a while and we can all grow together,,,, |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
That was a very powerful poem. If you think long enough, I'm sure you can come up with the inspiration... anyone can! Welcome! "It is in our aloneness that we recognize our oneness, even as the single droplet of water knows also that it is the sea."Daniel *Cassie Roseen* |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Welcome to Passions, WhiteNite. A powerful post. I look forward to reading more of your work. INclan |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent poem Dave. Welcome to Passions. I hope we will be reading more real soon. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
There's no better place to be inspired. Welcome to passions |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Dave, If it's inspiration you need you have certainly come to the right place. By the way , great piece. Such emotions are never easy to express, but you have done it well. Jeffrey |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
So tenderly written is thy poets words, from thy heart, from thy pen, You need a muse for inspiration, Lovely indeed thy sir knight!  < !signature-->"Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove. O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare [This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (edited 04-10-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
man i just love being right and its even better when so many others prove me so!(smile) thanx for the smiles today...glad you took my advice...you can write me a poem when you feel inspired LOL call it Tabbies Secret POST more poems now...like a good boy. later, jm "she said its cold out side and she hands me my raincoat... she's always worried about things like that"... rob is god ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
MORE. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading this. James |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
What a warm welcome. You guys are great. I guess I've found a new pass time. I'd take the time to thank each of you and reply to what you said but I'm pretty tired and about to go to bed..... hmm.. that almost had rythm... cool.. maybe I'm getting inspired or something. =) I've got another poem that I'd like to share from the past. I wasn't so sure about this one but I got brave enough to mail it to JM and she seemed to like it... apparently some of you share her taste so I guess I'll give it a try. =) Hope you like it. < !signature--> "The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) [This message has been edited by WhiteNite (edited 04-10-2000).] |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Just wanted to say I like your signature remark....if it reflects you...you truely aree amazing! "Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove. O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare |
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NamelessOne Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 197Biloxi MS |
Hey that was a good read ,Thanks |
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weaubleau Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 101MO |
great poem |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi WhiteNite, This was so beautiful I enjoy very much and welcome to passions. Cerenity |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Dave~ So captivating and inspiring Tracie~ Dave maybe just look around for awhile and then the inspiration may come again soon. I find by reading and replying I get inspired and then write like mad. Hope it works cause I like reading your stuff Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
very nice writing, welcome |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Well, (ahem)....any friend of that there JM's is a friend of mine! First of all, I love your name... Second, I hope to see more of your work! I really appreciated your comment on my poem, and so I decided to look you up, and see some of your work myself! So now the pressure is REALLY on for you to write more! LOL So glad to have you here in Passions sir. ***twiddling fingers*** while waiting for another post from you! LOL As far as this poem, it left me sadly breathless... |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Well... I finally have a little time off from the rushed life I'm living these pastfew days. It would figure that as soon as I find something that I *want* to do in my spare time everyone decides to take me up on offers to help them fix this or help them paint that or whatever..... blah... anyways. I wanted to post a thank you to everyone individually sense that seems to be the... uhhmm.. appropriate thing to do???.. well.. it seems to be what everyone else does. =) I've been wanting to do that I just haven't had the time to. So NEway... here's goes. TO ALL: THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!!!! Thank you for your compliments and warm welcomes. Thank you also for sharing your poetry with me. It's deffinitely and inspiration but I'm still a little blocked up over here and short on time lately. If I don't mention your name specificly it's because this statement pretty much covers it. =) You've all given me a little courage to try this poetry thing again, but it's still not flowing the way it did when I wrote those two that you've seen. I'll try to get some poems out as soon as I can... but man... it seems like everyone here is going to be let down by whatever I write now. All you've seen so far is the best of what's left of the poems I've written in the past. I've been out of practice for so long and those two poems are probably the best out of a hundred other's that... well... "bit the big one" so to speak. =) I guess what I'm saying is, I might have set everyone's expectations a little out of my grasp. But I'll try... promise. For those of you who haven't read it there is a second poem of mine up here called "Shattering like glass"... in my opinion it's not as good but it's better than anything I've been able to muster up in the past few days. Femme: Yeah, I've grown a little fond of JM myself from the little I know of her. =) And thank you, I like your name too... not sure about it's meaning but it sounds really cool. =) Tracie: Yeah, I've been inspired by a few here... actually a lot. But only one really got me into a groove. Unfortunately I read it at work and couldn't get it out onto paper before I was out of the mood. I also tend to start writing down things similar to other peoples poems (snicker.. OPP) when I get inspired by them so it doesn't always work very well. Romantic Heart: Thanks, I've had that signature in a file on my computer forever and I don't know how it got there!!!! I may have even written it myself but I find it hard to believe that I could write that and not remember it. ;-) It's very much like me actually... when I fall for someone I'll justify everything they do no matter how much it hurts, I'll let them walk all over me until there's no hope left in me for us. Blah blah blah.. anyways.. I think it's a good reflection of me.. but that's just my opinion... I'm sure my ex's opinions are very different. =) A muse for inspiration? Very possibly so... my moments of greatest inspiration are when I'm in love.... and as the last two poem show, another burst of inspiration when that love comes to an end. Jan: How can I thank you for showing me this place? It's wonderful, and I'm enjoying you being right too. =) I'll try to write a poem for you, but it'll be hard to find one that is worthy of your name. =) < !signature--> "The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) [This message has been edited by WhiteNite (edited 04-11-2000).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Excellent poem! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 I see I have been missing some great writings lately..this is wonderful and a beautiful way to make an entrance, what ever is stirring you to write please continue. Thank you so much for sharing what you have within you....it's amazing!Welcome To Passions!! Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
After Butterflies lavish response, this is such a hard act to follow, but just a few words to say welcome and then look in you e-mail for a little note from me Liz |
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