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meditation upon a swinging hammock

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Elliott
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0 posted 04-09-2000 06:06 PM       View Profile for Elliott   Email Elliott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elliott

The hour of silence will come just after the sun has set,
As the marching men pass along in their 3-piece suits
On the way back to their humming houses.
We take the last breath of the day, then turn away,
Allowing the breeze to rest:  
Iím glad that it brought you along with your tangled locks,
Dreamy darkness.

The stately, barren trees see all-
Conquering the vastness of time,
Transcending reason and rhyme,
And sensing the endless appeal of her breath against mine.

Take your place in my arms just as Fate would have it;
Let it all rot away into the air
As Fate will have it, save you and I-
Itís all that matters to me:
A lingering whisper from the lips
of Eternity.

And you will lie down before me-
The way it should be,
And Iíll stand here beside you, forever lost in the haze
Of the barely breathing summer day.  
You will show me a sign of heaven this time:
This I know, for they have yet to meet
On the sacred ground around this old oak tree:  
Your thick red wine, and this young heart of mine.

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c. Aug., 1999 by DEM


[This message has been edited by Elliott (edited 04-09-2000).]
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Martie
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1 posted 04-09-2000 06:16 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I really like this Elliot--you have a unique way of writing and using words...humming houses--oh I like that.  
Janet Marie
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2 posted 04-09-2000 09:27 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

We take the last breath of the day, then turn away,
Allowing the breeze to rest:  
Iím glad that it brought you along with your tangled locks,
Dreamy darkness.
-------------------
Transcending reason and rhyme,
And sensing the endless appeal of her breath against mine.
------------------
And you will lie down before me-
The way it should be,
And Iíll stand here beside you, forever lost in the haze
Of the barely breathing summer day.  
You will show me a sign of heaven this time:
This I know, for they have yet to meet
On the sacred ground around this old oak tree:  
Your thick red wine, and this young heart of mine.
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*SIGH*...this is of poetic perfection...
I could inhale this poem...just did (smile)
I do like the way you write.
take care,jm

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie

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3 posted 04-09-2000 09:33 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Elliott, this is a very good poem. The thoughts are good and you use some excellent phrases strung together just right. Nice work.....
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Wonderful poem, Elliott! I enjoyed this very much!

Denise
 
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