»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #6
»
The Profit
| Open Poetry #6 |
|
The Profit |
|
|
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
|
The Profit Thought I saw you in younger days, walking down Ocean Boulevard, midnight hair swaying side to side, bright eyes piercing all who dared look at the freak who walked there. Jeans shaped like blue bells, black beard long and tangled, gracefully gesturing to the sky lost in monologue, or dialogue? Slung across bare chest, a gun belt, guitar held across your back, a funny looking cigarette dangled from pouting lips, that unforgettable stench. You whistled and sang words aloud, some tune recalled from the past, a child of God walking along the road, filtered the stardust in my mind. I looked again, but you had gone if you were ever really there, for I know what I saw was impossible, you died way back in seventy-four. Even if reports of your death somehow were fabricated, you couldn’t look the same as then some twenty six years later. Unless… © 2000 CM Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 04-09-2000).] |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Corinne, I LOVE this...its such a COOL poem...WAY COOL!! the imagery is excellent and the story you tell is most intriguing great work on this piece. take care jm The stars shine so bright, now's the time I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face, Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you And held you close. Now I will reach for the stars... Because Oh my love, that's where you are... Though the storms of black night rage on I still see your face I still feel your lips on mine And though my heart feels all alone without you I still hear you sing to me I still hear your voice on the sea... vertical horizon |
||
|
Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
My oh my, I loved this, I could picture him walking...and I remember '74 oh too well! This is beautiful Kathleen |
||
Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
this poem brought on the vision of deja vu. great work Jeffrey |
||
|
Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Whew! Sends me back in time for sure, loaded with memories. That WAS me, Corinne, and I'm still around  |
||
Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ Your vision conjures up many a figure of the 70's. They do live on in our memories .. thanks for stirring the pot. (and I don't mean that funny looking cigarette !)  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
||
|
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you Janet Marie, Irish Rose, Jeffrey, Balladeer, Marge. Corinne |
||
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne, You poem stired memories, is that ocean boulivard in brooklyn? I once lived there. *L* |
||
|
JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very well written...I enjoyed this...James |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh...a very good tale you have told here  |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Excellent poem Corinne--wow!...I have seen that guy before, then and now..right here in L.A., or was it San Francisco? |
||
|
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Seymour, James, Hoot Owl, Martie, many thanks. Corinne |
||
|
Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Yes, I think this guy appears in all the big cities. Very interesting ending, very imagintive. Parker |
||
|
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You took me back in time too, Corinne! Great writing! Denise |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
