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Destiny
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0 posted 04-08-2000 01:41 PM       View Profile for Destiny   Email Destiny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Destiny

adrift on the river
listening to the water rhythmically caress our boat
while the soft sounds of the city serenade us from the shore

                                        i hear my heart pound

the lighthouse shrinks
as the island slowly fades from my sight

                                        i see your face

summer breezes tousle my hair
and the vessel rocks gently

                                        i feel your hand in mine

hints of red wine linger on my breath

                                        i taste your lips

my eyes close, attempting
to hold on to this moment
to spend a lifetime inside of this fantasy and
my soul sighs
fulfilled by your presence
awestruck by what can only be called completion

                                        i know your heart

© Copyright 2000 Destiny - All Rights Reserved
Songbird
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1 posted 04-08-2000 01:44 PM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

Simply beautiful, and I like the way you formated it, lends to the the mood of of being adrift. Very well written, hope to see more of your poetry..
Janet Marie
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2 posted 04-08-2000 04:17 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

destiny this is exquisite..so serene and sensual and calming...very nice...perfect presentation as well.
very enjoyable read...
we live souly to know this "completion"
great work
take care, jm

 The stars shine so bright, now's the time
I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face,
Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you
And held you close.
Now I will reach for the stars...
Because Oh my love, that's where you are...
Though the storms of black night rage on
I still see your face
I still feel your lips on mine
And though my heart feels all alone without you
I still hear you sing to me
I still hear your voice on the sea...
vertical horizon

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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3 posted 04-08-2000 04:34 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

This is exquisitely written with a beautiful presentation.  Made me feel as though I were there with my love.
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4 posted 04-08-2000 06:56 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Destiny~
Such a lovely poem presented with beauty.
I sure enjoyed this trip as seen through
your eyes.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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5 posted 04-08-2000 09:19 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Destiny,
        you have captured the feeling of being on that boat wonderfully. . .

Now, if I can just find those oars!   LOL

Wonderful poem, my friend. . .I really like it

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Poet deVine
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6 posted 04-08-2000 10:28 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Incredible! I could 'feel' this poem!!  
Destiny
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7 posted 04-10-2000 04:20 PM       View Profile for Destiny   Email Destiny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Destiny

"and now if you'll look to your left you'll see...."  
thanks for taking this trip with me! (even though it was originally intended for two  

and sven? if you've lost our oars does that mean we're stranded on the water? (oh darn!)

Destiny  
Sven
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8 posted 04-10-2000 10:18 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

I guess it does Destiny. . . should we swim for it, or hope that the tide takes us in?



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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



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9 posted 04-10-2000 11:37 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

beautifully crafted

oh, the taste of the sweet salt air

Jeffrey
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Oh geesh...I *sighed* so hard after reading this, I darn near fell out of the boat!  LOL  I remember how it feels to be in love like that...it's been a LONG time, but thanks for reminding me anyways....SIGH....I've had a few moments like that, where you just want time to stop, so you can freeze the moment.  Beautiful Destiny...breathtaking work, and memories!  
Isis
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11 posted 04-29-2000 02:13 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Adrift with the man you love, nothing finer?
Hope you get to make many tales and memories together Destiny.  Beautiful picture you painted hon..  

 A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


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I guess I did find more from you.  This is really wonderful.  I have one question: Did you ever find the oars??  

passion is life. . . ~Diana

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