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lucky
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since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho

0 posted 2000-04-08 08:42 AM


Remember

Spring is
a miracle when
ever it happens buds
break robins return and
ever so softly wellcome as I was
in courage by a fiend to be gone this
journey never linking for a weak or so that it cold
get used this way it did too I’m so glad butt sad you there
yet your presents brings such relief to this aura vaginal draft
and purr puss of mist little chapter which was to leaf you
into a piece full come for table ground but if you no
thing like me you be tried of the same mold
contempt or airy voids that sneaks to
glory fly woke gather then tall
ants which draft tick
ally skewers art and graces
such in dived level souls with the
drudge airy of woke..! I can soy tan any
be leaf which is the truth of this fawn ally if own
lye manna festered threw a single palm or many foams
thy music your peach the very mass sagé of finessé
in appear ants and at tit lewd shod be in tart
con trash to ease kind of odor ease
very same will not rest pond
to a poets rule of dumb
which pears to be just act
ally what they lethal ridge ally
cordon wit newt protest or sin sure
as a mark of ally ants in this fare fate of
finessé... so if I woke at it yon enough
will fat make it add mire able odor
I weight for the voids to rule
ball looming nocturne
ally true in neat..?
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[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 04-18-2000).]

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1 posted 2000-04-08 08:56 AM


Lucky~
It matters not the years of your calendar,
with beauties like this ...
you are forever young !

This is so replete with imagery.
You are doing some marvelous poetry,
my friend.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


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Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
2 posted 2000-04-08 10:41 AM


You painted a beautiful picture here, Lucky, with such vivid imagery .....
Perfect !!!!

 "Shoot for the moon.Even if you miss,you'll land among the stars."
_Les Brown_

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
3 posted 2000-04-08 11:19 AM


~Lucky~

I felt like I was "in" this piece. Wonderful imagery you have done here. You have a refreshing style and i agree with marge, doesn't matter the number of years you are. age is just a number...i know a major cliche but it's the truth! take care


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[This message has been edited by Aimster (edited 04-08-2000).]

Martie
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4 posted 2000-04-08 11:42 AM


Lucky--this is full of beautiful images and words placed just so in that lucky tangle of thought and the last lines were perfect, bringing back humanness and you...even if you are wise not old you are a super poet and man...
lucky
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since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
5 posted 2000-04-08 03:14 PM


You know what..!

You guy's are the real miracle. Rosemary is over there trying to climb out of my poem but says she got a good one stewin'. I thank you all so much.

 

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
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6 posted 2000-04-08 03:18 PM


Your poem sings of simplicity, awareness, anticipation, childlike wonderment, and the beauty of what it all means to a sensitive soul. I enjoyed this very much!

~ Claire

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho
7 posted 2000-04-08 04:28 PM


Sweet memories pouring over me in the power of your words.  What a gift!  I think this is one of your best, though there are so many of your best, it's hard to determine! But honestly, those surprise endings!  I don't know!  (Just teasing, you know!) Your descriptions of the sights and sounds of springs from seasons of life unending, are so vivid and rich.


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