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RobertB
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0 posted 2000-04-07 11:26 PM


My Father's Debt


As I held
my sobbing
firstborn son
broken of heart
and spirit,
comforting him
with my own tears
I realized that
the debt
handed to me
decades ago
had been paid.
The account balance
with accrued interest
was now cleared
releasing
the first lienholder
on the title
of Fatherhood.


Robert

 if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.



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Meadowmuse
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1 posted 2000-04-07 11:31 PM


Robert, this is a touching piece, so beautifully expressing what it is to take up the legacy of fatherhood. I enjoy, so much, your writing.

~ Claire

Poet deVine
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2 posted 2000-04-07 11:40 PM


So full of emotions...sadness and hope...  
Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-04-07 11:42 PM


this is excellent...very deep and thought provoking...both poems here are written from "way deep"...as are all of yours...your poetic tradmark I'd say.
great job on both of these tonight.
take care, jm

 The stars shine so bright, now's the time
I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face,
Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you
And held you close.
Now I will reach for the stars...
Because Oh my love, that's where you are...
Though the storms of black night rage on
I still see your face
I still feel your lips on mine
And though my heart feels all alone without you
I still hear you sing to me
I still hear your voice on the sea...
vertical horizon


Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2000-04-08 03:36 AM


RobertB~
This piece is stunning.
What a marvelous realization
you have come to know.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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RobertB
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5 posted 2000-04-08 07:40 AM


I really appreciate your thoughts.

This was a turning point in my life I do believe.


Robert

Denise
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6 posted 2000-04-08 10:33 PM


This is so touching, Robert. Very well written!

Denise

RobertB
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7 posted 2000-04-09 10:44 PM


and one more Denise!
WhtDove
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8 posted 2000-04-09 10:52 PM


Robert! Deep this is. I know my husband has said often, I thought I was a man until I had kids.  Wonderful!!

 <*\\\><

YOUR LIFE IS NOT A COINCIDENCE. IT'S A REFLECTION OF YOU!



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9 posted 2000-04-09 11:46 PM


Absolutely RobertB!  Simply amazing, isn't it?  Much like this poem...striking chords in serenity...
Jeffrey Carter
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10 posted 2000-04-10 12:24 PM


Robert,
I could feel your pain my friend .
Know that it is all worth it in the end.

Jeffrey

RobertB
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11 posted 2000-04-10 08:16 AM


'Becca....what a wonderful thing for your husband to say.....I really like that!!

Thank you senrenity....and Jeffrey thank you and nice to meet you.

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