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RobertB
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Champaign, IL


0 posted 04-07-2000 11:26 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RobertB

My Father's Debt


As I held
my sobbing
firstborn son
broken of heart
and spirit,
comforting him
with my own tears
I realized that
the debt
handed to me
decades ago
had been paid.
The account balance
with accrued interest
was now cleared
releasing
the first lienholder
on the title
of Fatherhood.


Robert

 if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.


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Meadowmuse
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1 posted 04-07-2000 11:31 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Robert, this is a touching piece, so beautifully expressing what it is to take up the legacy of fatherhood. I enjoy, so much, your writing.

~ Claire
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley


2 posted 04-07-2000 11:40 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

So full of emotions...sadness and hope...  
Janet Marie
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this is excellent...very deep and thought provoking...both poems here are written from "way deep"...as are all of yours...your poetic tradmark I'd say.
great job on both of these tonight.
take care, jm

 The stars shine so bright, now's the time
I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face,
Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you
And held you close.
Now I will reach for the stars...
Because Oh my love, that's where you are...
Though the storms of black night rage on
I still see your face
I still feel your lips on mine
And though my heart feels all alone without you
I still hear you sing to me
I still hear your voice on the sea...
vertical horizon

Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores


4 posted 04-08-2000 03:36 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

RobertB~
This piece is stunning.
What a marvelous realization
you have come to know.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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RobertB
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5 posted 04-08-2000 07:40 AM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

I really appreciate your thoughts.

This was a turning point in my life I do believe.


Robert
Denise
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This is so touching, Robert. Very well written!

Denise
RobertB
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and one more Denise!
WhtDove
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Robert! Deep this is. I know my husband has said often, I thought I was a man until I had kids.  Wonderful!!

 <*\\\><

YOUR LIFE IS NOT A COINCIDENCE. IT'S A REFLECTION OF YOU!


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Absolutely RobertB!  Simply amazing, isn't it?  Much like this poem...striking chords in serenity...
Jeffrey Carter
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State of constant confusion!


10 posted 04-10-2000 12:24 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Robert,
I could feel your pain my friend .
Know that it is all worth it in the end.

Jeffrey
RobertB
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'Becca....what a wonderful thing for your husband to say.....I really like that!!

Thank you senrenity....and Jeffrey thank you and nice to meet you.
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