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Good Night Sweet Prince

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Marilyn
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0 posted 04-07-2000 10:12 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marilyn

Good night sweet Prince,
As midnight falls.
Around this heart,
Within these walls.

The sleep of death,
A beckoning call.
The weary lids,
Begin to fall.

The brightest spark,
Is fading fast.
Good night sweet Prince,
Will feelings last?

And now the end,
The thoughts do cease.
The tears subside,
A sweet release.

A final kiss,
A final breath.
A final tear,
A final death.

Good night sweet Prince,
As midnight falls.
Around this heart,
Within these walls.

© Copyright 2000 Marilyn - All Rights Reserved
ElektraXOXO
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1 posted 04-07-2000 10:15 PM       View Profile for ElektraXOXO   Email ElektraXOXO   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ElektraXOXO

Are you related to that guy who wrote Romeo & Juliet? It was a great peom.
RobertB
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2 posted 04-07-2000 11:10 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

wow Marilyn.....I hate to ask......
Balladeer
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3 posted 04-07-2000 11:23 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Marilyn, does this mean that last date didn't go too well?

The poem is excellently written, by the way, almost haunting in its effect. Nice work...
Mike
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4 posted 04-08-2000 12:07 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Nicely written.  Carried the mood well, enjoyed.
Dusk Treader
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5 posted 04-08-2000 12:22 AM       View Profile for Dusk Treader   Email Dusk Treader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dusk Treader

Wow, Marilyn... What a great poem, so dark and sorrowful and it flows so smooth.  What a mood you evoked, greatly enjoyed.

 Abrahm Simons

"...Watching fate as it flows down the path we have chose" - Trent Reznor, "We're in this Together"
One Who Understands
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6 posted 04-08-2000 01:22 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

It kind of reminded me of Romeo and Juliet

Wonderful peom!
Marge Tindal
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7 posted 04-08-2000 02:58 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Marilyn~
When you pop in here ...
you do it in style.
This is open-hearted emotion.
I like it.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 04-08-2000 03:04 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

This one touched me deeply
It is so well written
Liz
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9 posted 04-08-2000 05:37 AM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

This is beautiful and sad and I love it.I hope the next prince evokes happier feelings in you. You deserve all the happiness...one day you'll find it.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie

Marilyn
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Elektra....No relation to Shakespeare that I know of...lol. Thanks for the compliment though.  

Robert...Nothing much to tell my friend. Just some poetic rambling from a lonely woman.  

Mike....Date went fine. Just no sparks..you know.   Thanks for the compliment. I tried to make it quite haunting. I am glad it worked.

Tim...Thankyou. I am glad you enjoyed.  

Abe....Thanks. I am glad you enjoyed. It was supposed to be dark and sorrowful. Seems all I can write lately.

One who Understands....Such a compliment. Thankyou.  

Marge....You are such a sweet lady. Thankyou for your kind words.

Elizabeth....I am glad you enjoyed.  

ESP....Love is such a fickle thing. You make connections with people but yet it has to be just right to be real. Always enjpy the friendship even if the spark isn't there.  
LoveBug
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11 posted 04-08-2000 11:36 AM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Wow, this is a beautiful poem! Great job.

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
Martie
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12 posted 04-08-2000 11:47 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This is excellent poetry, so beautifully written and full of emotion.
Denise
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13 posted 04-08-2000 10:57 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent writing, Marilyn! This did convey a haunting sadness.

Denise
Rex Allen McCoy
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14 posted 04-09-2000 12:17 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

Your Prince of hearts is searching yet
he'll not give up
until you've met
~
In castle walls
deep in your heart
only time keeps true love apart
~
So
Before you close your eyes this night
leave lipstick on
with candle bright


Loved your poem
Rex}>{{{{o>
JamesMichael
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15 posted 04-09-2000 02:12 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

The first four lines did it for me..I love this...lovely writing.   James
Mistikman
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16 posted 04-09-2000 04:42 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Excellent work Marilyn, I love the almost chanting quality of this one. I can relate to the emotions portrayed here.
hoot_owl_rn
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17 posted 04-09-2000 05:55 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

WOw...Marilyn, this is fantastic. Oh so haunting though.
WhiteNite
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18 posted 04-10-2000 02:21 AM       View Profile for WhiteNite   Email WhiteNite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhiteNite's Home Page   View IP for WhiteNite

Well... I'll have to brush up on my poetry lingo before I'll know if it's "haunting" or not, but it made the trip to teh second page of post worth while and I think I'll make that my last read for the night... thanks.

 "The storm rises up when the shadows descend
every beat of my heart every day without end
I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break
till theres no more to give if thats what it takes
I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed
I will lay down my life if thats what you need
every second I live thats the promise I make"

I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =)
weaubleau
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19 posted 04-10-2000 02:28 AM       View Profile for weaubleau   Email weaubleau   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for weaubleau

very, very moving.

my heart dropped on the "a final kiss" stanza...

wonderful writing.
Jeffrey Carter
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20 posted 04-10-2000 02:35 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Most impressive. This is filled with such passion and heartbreak. Conjures up memories I thought were gone forever. Thanks for sharing it.

Jeffrey
Marilyn
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21 posted 04-10-2000 04:18 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

LoveBug...Thanks you so much for your appreciation.  

Martie...I am humbled by your compliments.  

Denise...coming from you, those wards are a great compliment. Thankyou.  

Rex..Thankyou so much for a lovely poem in reply. Though lipstick doesn't like my pillow much. lol

James...I am so very glad you enjoyed it.  

Travis...I am glad that you could appreciate this piece. Thankyou for you comment.  

Ruth...my friend. Your words touch me and make me blush. You know I consider you an amazing poet and for you to have thought this was fantastic....I am speachless.  

WhiteNite...Thankyou so much for the compliment and for reading my piece. I have not seen you here before so I shall also say welcome to Passions.  

weaubleau....I am glad my writing could evolk such a reaction. Thankyou for reading.  

Jeffrey....I am very glad you enjoyed this piece. I am sorry that it brought back painful emotions though it did help me rid some of mine.  
Thurman
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22 posted 04-10-2000 04:27 PM       View Profile for Thurman   Email Thurman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Thurman

I thought it was wonderful. i know you now in a very bittersweet way.  What a heart you posess.
Lance (Thurman)
Christopher
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23 posted 04-11-2000 01:09 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Rock!


Ka-blam! A home run with this Marilyn! Not only a bad-azz poem, but love the format! You go girl!
Severn
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24 posted 04-11-2000 07:47 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Ohhhhhhhhhhhh....

   ~tear~

Lovely Marilyn...

K
 
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