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Womb With A View
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Womb With A View |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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If I could have had a womb with a view, A small, tiny window that I could look through To get a wee glimpse of the world I would know Would I be excited or not want to go? If I had a preview of what lay in store The moment one passes through Life's opened door Would I be content to be pulled out with pride Or consider it best to have just stayed inside? Would I have come willing, so eager to see The wonderful world waiting out there for me Or would every soul in the ward hear me shout "Forget it, you people! I ain't coming out!!!" |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
ROFL!! Love it! I ain't coming out. We can wish can't we, but nothing in the world can stop that. Thank GOD! LOL |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Hmmm...the latter sounds pretty good to me. Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Deer, you know you love this life and all these fabulous words to put together in a song or a story or passionate love...and also, what would we have done if you had chosen wrong?....what an interesting smiling poem...just like you. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Ever the thinker my friend. lol. I don't know how you come up with your muse but, hun, never let it be silenced.  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Balladeer, you always have the neatest slant on things...  Clever writing, very "out"sightful. ~ Claire |
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ElektraXOXO Junior Member
since 2000-04-07
Posts 30San Antonio Tx |
Two thumbs up Very funny reading |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
okay...I'm learning here...Im a little slow...but I'm getting it(smile) read Sweet Balladeers poem...but dont try to figure them out till you read the last line...where the punch and kick are. LOL great poem B, and as always it has that Balladeer perspective IE: VIEW LOL take care, jm |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Very cute concept here Mike!!! Me thinks I'd just stay inside too!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Dovey....I'm sure mothers everywhere agree with you! Elizabeth...and miss all this? No way  Martie...Such nice things to say! You're so sweet. Marilyn..I don't know, either. Maybe it's the drugs.....KIDDING!!! Claire....LOL at outsightful! I thank you. Elektra..Thank you indeed. Nice to meet you Janet Marie..Why, whatever do you mean ?devina...forever fetus? Ya better think it over..... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ You are just so clever. Where on earth did this one come from? Welcome, sir. We reserved you a womb with a view. You can look out and decide what to do. To boldly go where others have gone or stay here and enjoy it all alone. It's fitted with amenities galore You will enjoy it that's for sure. Your own private pool where you can wait before deciding your very own fate. If you like the view out the window you see, we'll arrange a special delivery. The men in white coats will take you away If you like what you see, you won't have to stay. But just remember as you exit this womb There's no coming back whenever there's gloom. You're stuck with the choice should you go There's no coming back ... don't ya' know. Oh, yes, there's one other thing. Which credit card will you be charging? Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Funny Balladeer I havent been in the forum for a while because I have been gradually reading all your pieces from previous forums. You are absolutely fabulous!!!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, Are you the guy who said stop the world I want to get off? Nive one enjoyed. Sy |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Oh my Deer... I never thought of you as a "Mommy's Boy"...  |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
When I first saw the title, I thought of Elmer Fudd. I see now that you did mean "womb" I like this one! Marie~ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
this is the best too cool yuh |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Sir Balladeer, If you had decided not to join the world think how much fun you would have missed out on, along with all the people you poke fun with, and all the fun in general, and God forsake don't forget the Golfing...LOL |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very funny..I think all of us have considered that option but our mom's have always provided only one choice... I can't stand this pain and discomfort no mo!!! Into this world you now must go!!! James |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
This is so funny and original. Nice writing! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is great Balladeer, so funny!!  Denise Yours too, Marge!! Denise |
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