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License to "Love" Me.....(title suggestions??)

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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When did the words "I Love You"
Become a license for pain?
How can you say "I Love You"
And touch me opposite the grain?

You speak the words "I love you"
As you leave me in a heap
You weave the words "I love you"
While I cry myself to sleep

You utter soft "I love you"
While laughing at my life dreams
You pronounce it "I love you"
While you steal my self esteem

Declaring proudly "I love you"
While I hold in silent screams
Revealing kindly "I love you"
So nothing is as it seems

This license to inflict pain
Without guilt or harm to thee
My lifes blood taken in vain
Then the words come...you "Love" me





 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.



[This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 04-07-2000).]
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Janet Marie
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1 posted 04-07-2000 12:45 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

When did the words "I Love You"
Become a license for pain?
How can you say "I Love You"
And touch me opposite the grain?
-----------------
You utter soft "I love you"
While laughing at my life dreams
You pronounce it "I love you"
While you steal my self esteem.
-----------------

oh girl...a few Emails back...you said you were gonna write from a deeper place...
your there my friend...your there.
you know --I know -- we shouldnt know...
this is excellent butterfly... and I gotta tell ya...the pic at the end...damn!!
says it all...
and all I need to say now is...
Butterflies are meant to be free...
and your words will let you fly.
love ya, jm


 The stars shine so bright, now's the time
I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face,
Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you
And held you close.
Now I will reach for the stars...
Because Oh my love, that's where you are...
Though the storms of black night rage on
I still see your face
I still feel your lips on mine
And though my heart feels all alone without you
I still hear you sing to me
I still hear your voice on the sea...
vertical horizon

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2 posted 04-07-2000 04:26 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

ButterfliesDC~
You've set upon a new course.
Fly !
~*Marge*~


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Butterflies_dont_cry
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Janet Marie and Marge** My own personal angels....you two know how to make me smile  
I've re-read this and the title...which is definately not my strong suit....it just doesn't Feel right...any suggestions would be quite welcomed.

This was really difficult to write...it's hard to look so far inside...I guess I'm afraid that I'll fall in.
But your words of encouragement have made it much easier to peek and be "pulled" back out.
Thank you ladies  


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

JamesMichael
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I read it and I like it and I have lots of suggestions for a title...they are as follows...Not as it seems...License for pain...It doesn't feel right...Looking far inside...Falling In...Pulled back out...Silent screams....Need I go on....
Hope I didn't confuse you by offering so many..James
Butterflies_dont_cry
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LOL...well confusion is a state of mind I'm used to so you made me feel quite at home....lol Thank you for reading and for your suggestions  
Janet Marie
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I'm BAAAAAACK LOL

ya know...I dont think the title is so bad...it ties in perfect with the several times you use the word "license" in the poem...it seems the natural choice of words.
I like it.Do you dislike it that much?  

one that comes to mind...(that has nothing to do with the wording of the poem is)...

"You cant pull the wings off this butterfly"
or..."Butterlfy in a bottle"


sorry..its  too early to be thinking so hard...havent had my caffeine yet (smile)

as for being afraid to look deep...always remember...we'll catch you if you "fall"
take care SS
love ya, jm

 The stars shine so bright, now's the time
I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face,
Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you
And held you close.
Now I will reach for the stars...
Because Oh my love, that's where you are...
Though the storms of black night rage on
I still see your face
I still feel your lips on mine
And though my heart feels all alone without you
I still hear you sing to me
I still hear your voice on the sea...
vertical horizon

hoot_owl_rn
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I can sadly relate to this one  
Denise
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Yep, I've been there too. Great poem, Butterflies! For a title I think I am partial to 'Silent Scream'. I think that sums up the feeling of this poem the best.

Denise
TerryW
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9 posted 04-07-2000 12:41 PM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

ButterfliesDC,
     This one is truly heartfelt.  I, too, like Ruth, can relate to this one.  And I often asked the same questions you did in my own mind.  This is very good.  Don't ever be afraid to write what you feel, because what you feel is your true power!



 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
weaubleau
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10 posted 04-07-2000 01:34 PM       View Profile for weaubleau   Email weaubleau   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for weaubleau

sadly, i hear some of these same words from my bestfriend each and every day.  this really touched my heart, and i'm sure it will touch hers.  
thank you so much.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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J.M.* LOL SS i t's not that I hate it I just don't feel like it fits....and ya know I REALLY like Butterfly in a Bottle!!!! BUT.........lol I think I'll have to write something to go with it...that will be a first!! The title....then poem!! Thanks for being the "catcher"...butterfly catcher...lol    

Hoot* I'm so sorry  

Denise* I think I'll throw them into a hat close my eyes and pick they have all sounded great, I just can't ever get the feel for the title, I'm going to have to send my poems to someone first and have them read and title them.......lol Thank you so much for reading!!

Weaubleau*   I see that you are new WELCOME!! and thank you for commenting.  I'm sorry your best friend can relate to this...but hopefully she can find comfort in knowing that she is not alone as you can tell by me and by the replies. Once again Welcome to Passions!


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

Aimster
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12 posted 04-07-2000 05:23 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Butterflies,

This was AWESOME!! I think everyone has pretty much summed up what I was going to say lol...but I gotta say this is GOOOOOD!! I am sorry that you can relate to this kind of pain and confusion. But you express it quite beautifully. I agree with the others...don't be afraid to look inside yourself. From what I have seen of you so far, you seem to be a lovely person to me with a loving heart and soul. Take care.

AMY  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
 
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