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Ahoooga
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0 posted 2000-04-06 10:55 PM


My Love for You

You break the ground
and plant a seed
You till the soil
and pull the weed

You give it nourishment
and watch it grow
You give it time
then suddenly, you know

First, a spark
and then a flame
It flickers and swells
it grows the same

Just a crack
and then ajar
The door swings wide
We've come so far

A few notes and words
become a song
The music ebbs and flows
It feels right, not wrong

It started small
and then it grew
My heart is filled
with love for you

© Copyright 2000 Helen Carter - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 2000-04-06 10:59 PM


Welcome to Passions! I like the comparisons you have used in this piece. Not bad! I will look forward to seeing more of your work!

Elizabeth



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-The Crucible


Aimster
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2 posted 2000-04-06 11:17 PM


~Ahoooga

Welcome to Passions!   Loved this poem! I really liked the way it flowed together and as Liz said...great comparisons! I will be looking for more of your work. take care,

AMY  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

Nan
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3 posted 2000-04-06 11:42 PM


I enjoyed the upbeat message and the flow of this poem.. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work... Welcome to Passions - Check your email for a special greeting..
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2000-04-07 04:23 AM


Ah~
Welcome to our family of Passion's poets.
Liked the rythmn of this entry.
~*Marge*~


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5 posted 2000-04-07 04:49 AM



Welcome to Passions!!!

This was a grand entrance   You told a beautiful tale of the growth of love...well done!!!  I look forward to reading many more!!


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.


Cerenity
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6 posted 2000-04-07 10:20 PM


Hi Ahoooga,

This is wonderful, I really enjoyed it.
Welcome to passions

Thank you,

Cerenity

Denise
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7 posted 2000-04-08 10:54 PM


This is a very beautiful poem! Welcome to Passions, Ahoooga!

Denise

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