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How Loud this Beating

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Martie
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How Loud this Beating


How loud this beating
through hazy breath
while I listen
glued to his chest as songs
leak out and drain into my ear
and this pretty peach sheet
so comfortable and reassuring
says this is just a day
but I can hear dying
and its sound slices through me
a foreign invasion named dread
for it is cleaving
and gaining strength from devouring
treading through the hope light
that blazed just a moment ago
when he told me that love
in all its strength and infinite
foreverness is and will be in this heart
that quickens trying to outrun time
and I think that it is this sweet warmth
that I want of love not some vapor
that clings to my dreams
and leaves me longing

and he just smiles
this tenderness that reaches
as I soak his shirt
with silent tears.

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Mike
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I find myself looking forward to your daily creation Martie.  I have yet to be disappointed; another special glimpse you have allowed us into your being.  Wonderfully written as always.
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Beautiful and tender, Martie. Very lovely.

Denise
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Martie~
It can't be easy dear friend.
I know your friend is glad to share
your tears as well as having shared
your love.
You're remarkable.
~*Marge*~



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Mike, you know I feel the same about your poetry...I look for you each day...but you arn't as consistant as I am.  

Thank you Denise for tender sees tender.

Marge--Yes, so true this sharing of joy and sorrow.  You are remarkable.
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Once again, I am in awe of the tenderness and feeling you display in your poetry....beautiful words  
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martie this is exquisite...wrote from you heart with such a tender touch,
I always find a smile in your poems.
take care, jm
Martie
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Ruth--Thank you for the lovely response.

Janet Marie--So glad you liked it with a smile.
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Martie,
Your writing always grabs me but this one gave an extra squeeze. You are a lovely lady.
*L* Sy
Elizabeth Santos
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Martie, I not only read this, but I read it over and over. You capture such tender exquisite moments. I can feel this.
And Sy, that was a very cute remark
Love ya both
Liz
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Hearts, full of sadness, full of love, weep together. With these words, you've captured my heart's song, Martie, and I thank you.

Sending warm hugs and understanding...
Claire
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Once again you wrench my heart of tears - just when I thought I'd none left - remind me I've something I must tell you
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