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When one and one make one

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Corazon
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0 posted 04-06-2000 01:09 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon


there is a part of you
connected to a part of me
and together we made
a whole
that was just perfect
not too full of me...
for to make room for you
I had to let a bit of me go
my selfishness, my pride and
my always have it my way
and my quick temper too,
that had to go.
and its not too full of you...
cause to add yourself to me
you had to let go of a little
a little machisimo
your tough, manly attitude,
your look out for only number one
and your impatience,
for sure that needed to go
for now there is one...
instead of two.

but the years have taken
a toll, that I fear is too great
to surmount.
I never felt myself leave
but there is now
less of me
less of my self respect
and certainly less of
who I used to be, and
much less respect
for the man you
turned out to be
there is less of your kindness
and less of your
want to take care of me
less of your smile
less of mine
and now I just feel a sadness
for the one
that used to be two.



[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-06-2000).]
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Janet Marie
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1 posted 04-06-2000 01:19 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

"but the years have taken
a toll, that I fear is too great
to surmount.
I never felt myself leave
but there is certainly now
less of me
less of my self respect
and certainly less of
who I used to be, and
much less respect
for the man you
turned out to be
there is less of your kindness
and less of your
want to take care of me
and less of your smile
and mine
and now I just feel a sadness
for the one
that used to be two.
-----------------------
corazon,
I think I knew what this one was about when I saw the title...this poem speaks of my heart like I  could have wrote it...how did you know(smile)...
deeply honest and personal, painful and real...
I understand.
very moving poem...very well expressed...

some times less is more...but never when speaking matters of the heart...
there comes a time when we all get tired of settling for less...I know we all deserve more...
take care, jm


 The stars shine so bright, now's the time
I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face,
Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you
And held you close.
Now I will reach for the stars...
Because Oh my love, that's where you are...
Though the storms of black night rage on
I still see your face
I still feel your lips on mine
And though my heart feels all alone without you
I still hear you sing to me
I still hear your voice on the sea...
vertical horizon

Denise
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2 posted 04-06-2000 01:21 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is so sad yet beautifully written Corazon. Very well written and expressed!

Denise
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3 posted 04-06-2000 01:30 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Beautiful poem, Corazon... but aching with sadness for lost dreams. *S*
Corazon
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4 posted 04-06-2000 04:36 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

Janet Marie, Denise, Ruth, thank you much, and yep I know sad....sigh...at least my crazy life brings out good poems  
Cerenity
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5 posted 04-07-2000 11:35 AM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi Carazon,

This is what I have been looking for, for a long time. I needed a understanding of what happend to the us and your poem said it all.
Thank you so much,

Cerenity
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 04-07-2000 02:53 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Corazon,
Good thoughts, good words, good poem. Enjoyed the read.
JamesMichael
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7 posted 04-07-2000 03:00 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Good writing Corazon...the relationship I am trying to end and resolve right now was similar in some ways...I feel like the foundation of a relationship is admiration and trust.  In retrospect I feel like my exwife never admired me yet I always admired her...however at this time there is nothing about her I admire and the things she has done have taken away all my trust...so there is nothing left.  James
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8 posted 04-07-2000 03:50 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Your words always speak so loudly to me, we are as mirror images at times.
Marge Tindal
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9 posted 04-08-2000 08:22 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corazon~
Lovely thoughts created here.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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lucky
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10 posted 04-08-2000 08:39 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

I'm still trying to figure out how 1 & 1 = 9

 
Pepper
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expressed beautifully Corazon
and yes, very sad .... true for too many .....

 "Shoot for the moon.Even if you miss,you'll land among the stars."
_Les Brown_
Meadowmuse
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12 posted 04-08-2000 02:10 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

This is indeed sad, but written so gently. A study in bitter realism. Thank you.

~ Claire
Martie
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13 posted 04-08-2000 08:19 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Corazon--From the heart, though sad and bleeding...you are still whole. Well written poem and hugs!
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14 posted 04-08-2000 08:25 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

The way you have woven these thoughts into this poem makes it the best thing I've seen you do. This is masterful, corazon....you should change your name to Phoenix  
passing shadows
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15 posted 04-09-2000 02:36 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

tears here, I can so relate to this pain you captured so well. good job
devina
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16 posted 04-09-2000 02:42 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Life does tend to suck when numbers melt away hun...you keep looking out for number one...and smile a purdy smile for lil ole D!!! Love you girl!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

dhuron
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17 posted 04-09-2000 04:42 AM       View Profile for dhuron   Email dhuron   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit dhuron's Home Page   View IP for dhuron

Great Poem, I can relate to it as well*sigh*

Perhaps in time, the feeling will melt away

 The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship."

--Ralph Waldo Emerson

Elizabeth Santos
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18 posted 04-09-2000 09:41 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sad quivers went through my spine as I read this superb verse. You have written the sorrow beautifully
Excellent poem, though heart wrenching
Liz
Corazon
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19 posted 04-10-2000 09:35 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

wow, all, I thank you from my heart, I never expected to come back today to so many kind loving responses....hugs to all
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20 posted 04-11-2000 02:28 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Corazon,
Nice to see you out and about yet. And I hope with time, the writing of these themed poems will help lay your feeling of loss to rest. If anything, you're discovering what you need to discover now -- and you know it's never to late to change. Take care, girlygirl.  

Mike
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