I was walking through this open woods and came upon this poem. Very nice. There is one teeny word that I would offer a suggestion on, (as I am reading The Seat of the Soul by Gary Zukav) but rather than point it out here, you may e-mail me or bring your poem to the calm waters of the Critical Analysis group.
By the way, I think that the names on this Web site are misleading. Instead of "Critical Analysis" for example, I think it should be called a "Mentoring Group". A critic is somebody who is trying to shoot someone down. A mentor is someone who is trying to help someone.
And instead of "Open 6" the name should be "Friendship Forum" as the title "open" implies that anything goes. Whereas "friendship forum" would imply that it doesn't- it's a forum of and for friends.
Anyway, I liked this poem, for what it's worth. (Just one little word)