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Such Small Thunder

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Martie
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Such Small Thunder

Such small thunder to my ear
these wings of flight
and I with nose against glass
looking  looking  
onto the patchwork earth.

The mountains do not wear snow caps
they are terrain for giant footsteps
each print so obvious from here
and splayed against sloping shoulders of snow.

This gratitude seems so small against
the sun that is provocative in hue
the color of passions lips
full and sultry in invitation,
watch me glide this sun
into the slivering sea.

The lake is the color
of desperate eyes
slipping from sparkle,
a sort of slushy moss
and so quiet
like paint poured and waiting
pooling and silent.

The sky has turned
and the ground glistens with stars
I can see the big dipper below,
a playing field perhaps
for the gods.

My heart turns into this ending
and the sky seems so familiar
it fills me like a love song
so recent and remembered
its closed eyed revere
raking my reality.
Glorious sun scraped vision
taking me away from heart

to heart of home.





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Mike
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Exquisitely done my friend...
"like paint poured and waiting
pooling and silent"
You have such a wonderous way with the English language, creating expressions and pictures of the mind.
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2 posted 04-05-2000 10:26 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
I flew passenger ...
you MUST have flown First Class
to have had such a lovely view.

Next time, I'm booking through YOUR agent !
Smiles sent soaring your way.
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Remarkable, Martie.  I especially loved:
"The lake is the color
of desperate eyes
slipping from sparkle,
a sort of slushy moss
and so quiet
like paint poured and waiting
pooling and silent."  

You evoke such imagery and intense emotion with your writing.  Excellent work.  


 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~
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Such colors you have on your palette, Martie, and what beautiful brush strokes!!  
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Martie,
Simply lovely, wonderful paint wonderful thoughts, wonderful work. *L*
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I always look for your poems when I have a chance.  This poem like all your poems has such refreshing, wonderful, original imagery. I will take your lines with  me on my next flight.  

Franni
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Vivid, visual and beautiful, Martie!

Corinne
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Martie, what can I add to the colorfull responses, it was wonderful, beautiful images to put me to sleep... Good night.


Parker
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Visions, incredible, but the feelings are so real I felt them myself, or perhaps it's mental telepathy enhanced by your poetry. Either way, I was there with you
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Another gorgeous work of art, Martie .......

 "Shoot for the moon.Even if you miss,you'll land among the stars."
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Friends, some people dread airplanes...not me...as long as I have a window seat.  Thank you so much for enjoying this trip with me.  
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There is no other view in the world like that from the window of a plane. I dread flying and only do so when absolutely necessary but that view is one that I will never forget! Beautiful poem, Martie!

Denise
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Your words never fail to move me  
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Denise and Ruth, thank you so much for liking this poem and for your constancy.
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The is a wonderful poem, as is all of your work. Chris
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a  year ago -  even then - you were writing poetry - with such sensationally beautiful images - I find myself short of breath - I'm frustrated trying to find words to reply adequate to your poems
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