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Michael
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0 posted 2000-04-05 10:48 AM


FAIRYTALE, part 4


Mount here this rage, lo, fiery red,
Take eye of fallen clan.
Within the cage wherein the dead
Throw dice in wage of man.

Armor yet donned in tarnished lieu
Of silent reverie.
Sanctity pawned till all left true
Falls before Destiny.

By vision smote, by dream laid waste,
The nomad heeds the call.
Ever remote by hands of haste
Bleeds the judgements of all!

The desert coals calling once more,
For skin from barren feet.
Upon one soul's lifelong deplore
Of Love's timeless deceit.

There wanders lost till forest shade
Quells the river of pain.
Suffers the cost of each vow made
To sweet lips kissed in vain.

Till deepest brown meshed softest green,
Peaceful magic implies.
Must stand, renown, before the queen
Of heaven's ceaseless cries.

Till passions sweep across the floor
The fragrance of romance.
Till lovers weep to hold once more
A choice over a chance.

No more a Prince, no more a King,
No steed of gothic hue.
Forever, hence, all heart shall sing,
Of Love found ever true.

Michael Anderson
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 For all behind was dark and drear,
And all before was night and fear.
How many hours of night or day
In those suspended pangs I lay,
I could not tell; I scarcely knew
If this were human breath I drew.

Lord Byron






[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 04-06-2000).]

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hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 2000-04-05 12:13 PM


What a wonderful conclusion to this one...sometimes love can bring the strongest of men to his knees  
Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
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2 posted 2000-04-05 01:07 PM


Bravo my friend, bravo!  This is absolutely spectacular.  I'm very glad you decided to extend this piece into an epic, because it's one of the best from you.  This was all you, guy...amazing story.  Two lines in particular that I just loved:

Armor yet donned in tarnished lieu
Of silent reverie.
Sanctity pawned till all left true
Falls before Destiny.

That is what poetry is all about, Michael.  

You've outdone yourself this time!


 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
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3 posted 2000-04-05 07:37 PM


Michael, this was just stunning!
Every single one of these could stand on their own. You've done an excellent tale, Excellent work! BRAVO BRAVO!!!!

Andrew Scott
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4 posted 2000-04-05 07:50 PM


DANG! But that be some fine written'! A wonderful finish to an epic read!  You should post these all as one for those whom have yet to discover them. Thanks for all your time and effort to produce such a great piece of art.  Thanks for sharing.
Poet deVine
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5 posted 2000-04-05 10:51 PM


Magic Michael is now your nickname...absolutely wonderful!!!
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2000-04-05 11:14 PM


Michael,
I agree with all the above. Pain sometimes sharpens the pen to a fine point. And you are now carving out some fine work. Wonderful poem.

Balladeer
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7 posted 2000-04-05 11:23 PM


Michael, I've read all parts and salute your mastery of the language and dedication to the art.....excellent work, my friend.
amber
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since 1999-06-15
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los banos, ca,
8 posted 2000-04-06 11:28 AM


"Till deepest brown meshed softest green"...I know we have Michael...tis the strangest, most beautiful thing, and I've found it in you!!! Me thinks this was my favorite one!!!
Love you!
~D


 Only after trying so hard to let go, did i realize how much i wanted to hold you forever> Amber and Ellis forever and always



Alwye
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9 posted 2000-04-08 12:01 PM


Stunning and truly wonderful conclusion, my friend!  What a tale you've woven, you indeed have remarkable talent.  

 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~

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