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0 posted 04-04-2000 11:39 PM       View Profile for Creperum   Email Creperum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Creperum

Welcome to our home, our new adopted son,
We will make you a part of our life.
Provide you with things your other family could not,
While you are with us you will be free from strife.

By the way, we've something to tell you,
We've saved you some time.
We've already planned your life out for you
Because letting you do it would be such a crime.

A nip here, a tuck there,
We really can make this life fit.
It will all work out perfectly
We will make you from a little kit.

Don't date that person.
You are forbidden to see them.
You see this is your life you're living
And they have not room to fit in.

You're free to choose your own path,
Or shall we say, "Only as long as we approve."
Because, you see, if we do not, dear son,
Then we will make life a living hell for you.

Off to college you go, dear John,
For this is how it is meant to be
We have laid out this future for you,
We really don't care what you think.

Go to work and go to school,
Work at the job we want you to.
Only because we love you, dear John,
We wouldn't want to lose our grip on you.

Don't speak a word, dear son,
You've already been spoken for.
You're friends have even been picked,
You need not choose anymore.

[This message has been edited by Creperum (edited 04-04-2000).]
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1 posted 04-04-2000 11:44 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

When I started I thought...oh a touching poem about adoption...then I stopped dead in my tracks...this is very powerful and makes me wonder in saddness how many times children have been adopted or naturally born with a pre-planned future..turning children into what the parents want them to be...Your poem made me stop and think...very well written!!

 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

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2 posted 04-05-2000 06:04 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I was raised with a very controlling dad and believe me it sucks and it puts you way behind in your relationships and the ability to make your own decisions.  I can sympathize with this young man.  I would have titled this poem The Two in Control.  James
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3 posted 04-05-2000 08:58 AM       View Profile for SorrowsMystress   Email SorrowsMystress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SorrowsMystress

Well, well, well, Creperum.....looks like another well developed and magnificent piece brought forth from your emotions and talents. I really, really like this one (As you know). Don't be so modest. Take credit where it's deserved. You have a natural talent and I (as well I'm sure as the others who read this and your other poetry)am amazed at how you're able to express yourself and allow your true feelings to flow outright on the paper. Keep up the writing, PLEASE....I'd hate to see such talent go to waste. Luv u bunches!

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4 posted 04-05-2000 11:34 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

This was an interesting read.  Speaks to the ways in which some would control the lives of their children and smother expression creativity.
Very good writing.
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5 posted 04-05-2000 09:00 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Excellent satire! I liked true it is that sometimes parents (even birth parents) will try to manipulate a child's life..that's how hate procreates.... nice to read you!  
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6 posted 04-10-2000 05:29 AM       View Profile for dhuron   Email dhuron   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit dhuron's Home Page   View IP for dhuron

Wonderful reading.  It is sad how parents can be like this. I am even more grateful for the parnets I have.

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7 posted 04-11-2000 01:00 AM       View Profile for WhiteNite   Email WhiteNite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhiteNite's Home Page   View IP for WhiteNite

  I remember feelingthat way once upon a time.  I might be a little further down teh road to happiness had taken the advice of good ol' mom and dad before I had to prove their theories true on my own. =)

Very nice poem

 "The storm rises up when the shadows descend
every beat of my heart every day without end
I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break
till theres no more to give if thats what it takes
I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed
I will lay down my life if thats what you need
every second I live thats the promise I make"

I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =)
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